Dinosaur Posted September 13, 2017 Share Posted September 13, 2017 (edited) My first experiment to express a few of my musical ideas. This composition is in need for some opinion. Edited September 13, 2017 by Dinosaur MP3 Play / pause JavaScript is required. 0:00 0:00 volume > next menu short_symphonic_miniature_(online-audio-converter.com) > next Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Monarcheon Posted September 15, 2017 Share Posted September 15, 2017 I'm just going to speak generally. The arc is shallow with the parts in each section feeling like a sort of polyphony struggling to get out but falling because of the natural chord progression you're following. It's fine as a collection of ideas, but the coherency falls short. More so important than the melody of the piece is the consideration of how many times you repeat something before changing it, if ever, and why. Step aside from the notes for a bit and look at the overarching phrases and periods and see what really worked and what didn't. The parts will follow that arc determination after. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dinosaur Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 On 9/15/2017 at 6:31 AM, Monarcheon said: I'm just going to speak generally. The arc is shallow with the parts in each section feeling like a sort of polyphony struggling to get out but falling because of the natural chord progression you're following. It's fine as a collection of ideas, but the coherency falls short. More so important than the melody of the piece is the consideration of how many times you repeat something before changing it, if ever, and why. Step aside from the notes for a bit and look at the overarching phrases and periods and see what really worked and what didn't. The parts will follow that arc determination after. Thank you for your time, I really appreciate it. Special thanks for your style - it is not so common instead of single "you suck" hear what you have to improve :) . Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OliverKovacs Posted September 17, 2017 Share Posted September 17, 2017 (edited) Sorry, my English is not perfect, but I'm trying to write my remarks. Memorizable and pleasant melody, but I think, it's too simple. In my opinion you should varied instrumentation and rhithm. You know, not just one two three four one two three four... A little bit monotonous. Edited September 17, 2017 by OliverKovacs Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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