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Sound design at the beginning: be careful of use of the pedal with half steps in the tenor/bass range.
Use of the borrowed iv chord around :35 was a little abrupt and I'm not really sure why it's there, since there are no real other chord alterations like it. You exit from it gracefully, but entering it isn't as smooth. The III at the end is a lot better executed. I'd also recommend a cadence unless the idea is she keeps twirling or something or other.
Other than the desire to have something a little bit more new without the running 8th notes, it was a nice, cinematic little piece. Congratulations.

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On 19. 11. 2017 at 6:26 AM, Monarcheon said:

Sound design at the beginning: be careful of use of the pedal with half steps in the tenor/bass range.
Use of the borrowed iv chord around :35 was a little abrupt and I'm not really sure why it's there, since there are no real other chord alterations like it. You exit from it gracefully, but entering it isn't as smooth. The III at the end is a lot better executed. I'd also recommend a cadence unless the idea is she keeps twirling or something or other.
Other than the desire to have something a little bit more new without the running 8th notes, it was a nice, cinematic little piece. Congratulations.

 

Thank you very much! I will keep in mind all your suggestions, I appreciate your opinion very much, thank you for taking time to listen and analyze! :)

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