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Hello? I am Hemio who studies composition as a hobby in Korea. I am not good at English so I can hardly communicate deeply, but I will try. This is a piano music that represents the Egyptian goddess.

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I'm not going to lie, at measure 14 I was kind of disappointed. It could have been a really cool chromatic etude or something, but the functional harmony kind of took out the drive and character for me a bit.
When returning to your A material, it could be cool to see something change about it every time... the chromatics are already intense, so to see intensity go up exponentially garners good audience reaction.

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Hello Hemio!

I like this piece!  Sounds like it would be so much fun to play! It also looks challenging. Jumpy chords can be difficult for the pianist, especially when hand position is quickly changing. I love the low octave theme and motifs you use all over this piece! I wish that they would become more developed as the piece goes on, though. It seems to me that it stays roughly the same the whole piece. You show us the theme in different textures or rhythms, but it never actually gets developed. Maybe if you get a chance to look at this composition again, you could think about this? 

Thanks for sharing this wonderful piano piece!

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This piece is so exciting! It reminds me of a soundtrack to a silent film. I agree with Jarron.Carlson that it has good emotion, but lacks substance. I could see this as an accompanying part of a melody, maybe consider adding another instrument such as voice or violin. I think you could do this without changing the piano part much. 

I can see how the Egyptian Goddess Sekhmet inspired you to write this. Please write more music about Egyptian gods, I enjoyed this one so much!

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Nice concert piece! Full of motion, energy and momentum. Vry virtuosic. I felt that the beginning was a bit repetitive. Some variation would've been nice. A few small details:
1:23, 1:58 and resolutions in melody expected
1:38, 1:42 and 1:44: lowest note should be C instead of D. Some sort of deal at 2:0.
1:50: the ninth leap in the melody line sounded quite awkward. Pretty weird.
2:45, 2:46 and 3:20: I don't think and Ab7 chord fits. Ab triad is good enough.
2:47: Left hand plays unnecessary notes. Also makes playing more difficult.
3:21: ii6 chord expected instead of original, followed by i46

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