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A little piano piece that I wrote.

Hope you enjoy!

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The main theme is very catchy.

I'm not a big fan of writing in sctirctly classic styles, but I like it.

There is a disbalance in the dynamic range. Too loud for forte and too soft for piano.

The part with the chords from m. 50 is more ¿modern? There is some enharmonic note that should be fixed like Db in measure 57 (C#?)

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Well done!

I was about to write a comment but then when I came to press the "Submit" button I was notified that @Luis Hernández posted a comment here,

then  I read it and... that's exactly what I wanted to say (except for the last line, I didn't notice that),

and thought that you wouldn't want to read the same thing twice.

 

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Really nice work. It’s rare that I hear something so unrepentantly “classical” in style that doesn’t feel like just an exercise in music theory and “correct” writing, so to speak. You really put a lot of heart in this.

 

I enjoyed the entire thing. I have the tiniest nitpick, which I can’t even be certain of, because the tracker will not let me hear page 3, so maybe ignore me. Mss. 77-79, the cantabile, or “sung” passage, I just think the low D in ms. 79 is awkward. There’s no bass voice near it, and the “singer” leaps down a full 10th, which, in my head, sounds odd, in context. I’d recommend either just shoving it up an octave, or taking that F# quarter note, make it a half-note for the singer, and make the low D and A a playful staccato, being like pizzicato violin for the “singer.” Or just totally ignore this, I’m practically splitting hairs here.

I really liked this piece, thanks for sharing 😌

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13 hours ago, SergeOfArniVillage said:

Really nice work. It’s rare that I hear something so unrepentantly “classical” in style that doesn’t feel like just an exercise in music theory and “correct” writing, so to speak. You really put a lot of heart in this.

 

I enjoyed the entire thing. I have the tiniest nitpick, which I can’t even be certain of, because the tracker will not let me hear page 3, so maybe ignore me. Mss. 77-79, the cantabile, or “sung” passage, I just think the low D in ms. 79 is awkward. There’s no bass voice near it, and the “singer” leaps down a full 10th, which, in my head, sounds odd, in context. I’d recommend either just shoving it up an octave, or taking that F# quarter note, make it a half-note for the singer, and make the low D and A a playful staccato, being like pizzicato violin for the “singer.” Or just totally ignore this, I’m practically splitting hairs here.

I really liked this piece, thanks for sharing 😌

 

Wow! Thanks, @SergeOfArniVillage !

I am glad you have taken the time to both review this and give 'nit-picky' feedback. This is what will help me improve, so thanks for your advice. I am also looking to improve the final theme and coda so your suggestion will help with this. 

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