Work in progress

I felt the music needed to take a breath. There's a lot of musical phrasing in there that shifts from passage to passage very quickly, and I was physically tired just listening to it. It also seemed to me that the percussion rhythm strove against the natural rhythm provided by the melody. (It might also be the reason the music seemed constantly out of breath. Dunno for sure, though.)

I liked the pentatonic feel of the main melody and think you've got a good thing going here, overall! I would suggest giving the rhythmic structure a bit of a tweak so it flows better with the melodic structure. Maybe use less drumming for this first part and only fill in rhythmically where the melody lacks. It might be interesting to hear some Eastern-sounding percussion, too, such as a gong or wood blocks. Just don't overuse them!

Keep it up!

Yeah I could probably switch the second 8 measures of percussion a little lighter, but trying to keep a crescendo sound to it to lead it back to the chorus.