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I was writing a study in E minor and now I'm stuck. I don't know where to go now and I don't know if what i have already is alright. Please review.

 

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@PBStu

First, I think that instead of changing the tempo you should change each note's length. Felt too short for a tempo change.

image.png.b073a67c7a3060524f7d6f4f8380ec42.pngThis part is too static for me.

In general- you seem to have a problem many beginner composers seem to have- you have lots of ideas but its either too consistent or too inconsistent.

Here's a piece I wrote five years ago:

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It's way too short, way too undeveloped, and has an incredible amount of ideas compared to it's length. Back then I'd give it 8/10, now I think its 2/10 at best.

The ideas don't have their respecting place to breath, develop, grow... same goes with your piece. 

Choose an idea or two (rhythmic, harmonic, melodic...) and use them and them only, though in different "colors" (minor/major/pitch and interval changes/long/short/stacc/legato, you know...)

Lets say we take this:image.png.6ca0cd0a31270e979205520e37591fb7.png

So:image.thumb.png.6f4ba3f438aae1d78d7c8859eba547fa.png

 

 

 

 

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As it stands it's too 'bitty' to do much with. You could consider it through-composed and move on to something else in a similar vein. Problem is you have a defined key which would give you problems. If you wanted to go down this route probably best to redo bar 20 and modulate to a new key - the relative major? 

I'm in agreement with Rabbival507, have a look at what you've got and see what can be developed. The tune from halfway through bar 5 to bar 11 could be developed. Write it out as a less-elaborate melody, harmonise it, look to modulating at the end.  So, vary the harmony. As it stands there's one place you could use chord IV possibly more if you adapt the tune. (One problem with the piece is it's ONLY in E minor - doesn't change key at all)

Bars 15 - 17 are banal and cry out for change of harmony (bar 16) and the high B in bar 17 lands on the dominant so you rearrange the run up and underpin it with a chord. The last note in that bar might then be better an f# or c nat. 

Having big ambitions is good but it also pays to work within your means plus a little extra!  Have a go at that melody. Try to vary it with some interesting harmony. It's easy to slip into the relative major (Gmaj via its dominant, D maj7) and back (via Bmaj7) or the subdominant (A minor), things like that.

Good luck.

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