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The Breath of Spring (String Quartet)


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This is great!  Some minor criticism is that sometimes you develop a phrase that doesn't seem to go anywhere or is an odd number of measures that kind of comes off sounding a bit uncomfortable like meas. 49 - 54 (a 5 measure phrase).  It sounds like that could be the beginning of a section featuring the cello on the melody but you move on to something else.  Just a thought.  Thanks for sharing!

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Overall, it was a nice piece! Some minor points, while I get that you wanted to bring out the 2nd violin, and that's great, because I've always felt that the first violin was overpowering in classical quartets, maybe you used the 2nd violin too much over the first violin. I would suggest maybe giving some melody back to Violin 1

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@PaperComposer I think I see what you mean - I did it intentionally at times simply because I wanted to round it off by returning to the original theme I used before ending the section in the home key in that manner. But I see how that's my bad that it's a bit misleading the listener into thinking it would continue into something. I wasn't confident enough to allow the piece to flow through sections so I made it more structured, that way it would be easier to introduce a new idea and key. So yeah I totally get that I could have made it into something else i just didn't know how/wasn't intending to in that way. Glad you thought it was great though!

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@Joshua Ng Yeah I agree, it's only because I was writing this for an actual string quartet to play that I decided to share the melody out in sections for longer than normal, otherwise they probably would have been shorter and more interspersed throughout the piece, but yeah probs should have more 1st violin on melody. Thanks for the feedback!

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