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Look- really, I'm not sure what you tried to achieve with the piece.

To me it just screams "cliche!" which is... fine in some cases I guess.

I'd try to get farther away from basic left hand patterns, all those useless octaves etc.

Try to organize your melodic material better in a way that it doesn't sound like an improvisation (you know, the patterns etc.)

The fact you haven't mentioned anything about what exactly it is you tried to achieve doesn't make it easier to try and guess.

To me it sounds like what you'd get if you googled "emotional piano pieces" or "sad anime ost" which are... just so very common and basic.

I'd say... try to rise above that. Try to get influences from other sources, a piano can be so much more than that

(pls refer to modern jazz musicians such as Tigran Hamasyan or romantic/post romantic ones like Debbusy).

ืฉืžืข, ืื ื™ ื‘ืฉื™ื ื”ื›ื ื•ืช ื—ื•ืฉื‘ ืฉื–ื” ื‘ืกื“ืจ, ืชืœื•ื™ ืžื” ื ื™ืกื™ืช ืœื”ืฉื™ื’ ืคื”, ื”ืขื ื™ื™ืŸ ื”ื•ื ืฉื–ื” ืœื ืžื—ื“ืฉ ืฉื•ื ื“ื‘ืจ ื•ืื ื™ ืžืืžื™ืŸ ืฉืืชื” ื™ื›ื•ืœ ืœื™ืฆื•ืจ ื™ื•ืชืจ ืžืืฉืจ ื™ืฆื™ืจื” ืงื˜ื ื” ื•ื–ื ื™ื—ื” ืžื”ืฉื•ืจื”

ืื ื™ ืœื ื™ื›ื•ืœ ืœื”ื›ืจื™ื— ืื•ืชืš ืœื”ืขืฉื™ืจ ืืช ื”ื™ื“ืข ืฉืœืš, ืื‘ืœ ืื ื™ ื—ื•ืฉื‘ ืฉื–ื” ื™ื•ื›ืœ ืœืขื–ื•ืจ ืœืš ืœื”ืฉื™ื’ ืžืฆืœื•ืœ ื•ืœื™ืฆื•ืจ ืื˜ืžื•ืกืคืจื•ืช ืฉืขื“ ื”ื™ื•ื ืœื ื”ืชืขืกืงืช ืื™ืชื... ื•ืฉื™ื•ื›ืœื• ืžืžืฉ ืœื”ืขืฉื™ืจ ืืช ื”ืขื•ืœื

๐Ÿ˜„ื”ืžื•ื–ื™ืงืœื™ ืฉื™ื•ืฆื ืœืš ืžื”ืจืืฉ

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