The long journey

Here is a simple piece for piano and oboe. I tried to convey the feelings of a weary man sitting down to look back at what he's been through.

The first (and last) section mm. 1-21 is written to be invertible.

I was wondering if I should write one more section, with variation on the melody for the oboe, to kind of "justify" the presence of the oboe, who is merely an "echo" of what the pinao has already said so far. That was my original plan, but I felt as I was writing it that this actually sounded like a good place to stop. Made the journey a bit shorter, but maybe that's better, I'm curious about your opinions. Also, do you think it needs an intro/prelude section before introducing the main melody?

Would love to hear your comments about it 🙂 

Edited July 28, 20214 yr by Coxi

Hi you have a very nice beginning sketch here with some nice basic elements.  There is much that needs to be developed and teased out.  Why didn't you write the treble piano part while also writing for the Oboe?  I also here some fugal elements that could also be brought out.

Edited July 28, 20214 yr by MJFOBOE

Yup yup, it was my intention to leave this one simple with a texture that mostly leaves the melody "naked". It gives me a lonely feel on that 2-part section. Same reason why I kept the writing on 2 voices on the piano+oboe section, though this one sounds less satisfying to me too, I agree. Maybe I'll fill out the piano part a little more.

I do intend to keep the first part as is tho. Simplicity was one of my main goals when writing it, and I feel like it still carries the point. Your comments do suggest that I should write some additional development part.I will try when I have some time, probably with piano+oboe, to give the oboe a bit more reasons to be there.

Thanks for your feedback!

Edited July 28, 20214 yr by Coxi

I would still add some reverb on it to make it more atmospheric! In it's current form melody sounds like simple midi melody (for my opinion). Or you can run this melody through harpsichord vst to make it sounds more elegant. For example- https://musescore.com/szekelyga/air-for-harpsichord-in-eb-major