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Thanks for listening to my version, I'm glad you like it :)
You can make a new one and then, editing the post, you can change the files.
I like the version you posted,
it contributes to the variety of styles and atmospheres here.
btw you don't need to @ me, I follow the post.
For what it is worth, I was actually criticizing Zimmer
I'd say perhaps you're trying too hard to sound cinematic-pirate-like. You actually do it so well that it backfires against finding your own musical identity, which is what I think composing should be about in the first place. You can, and should, freely stick to the style you're more comfortable with - but your listener should have a genuine reason to pick you over Hans Zimmer. That is why I am doubtful about using this as a part of your porfolio: it obviously proves you're very capable of writing music that screams "Pirates!" for a movie or videogame, but it doesn't help you to stand out from the pack of composers who could do likewise.
I'm writing this with the confidence that I'm not coming through as too harsh - since you said there's no "too harsh" upon the criticism you're asking for. I hope I'm actually being helpful by asking you to move closer to your musical self.
So... I'm going to first suggest you study harmony. You seem to know what you've heard and are trying to reproduce it but haven't quite found the rules for doing that. Even having the most basic harmonic language in your back pocket would be good.
It just seems like you're trying to have all the voices do something interesting. This is known as "counterpoint" and no matter what set of rules you're following it always needs to be treated delicately, otherwise it's impossible to distinguish what's more important or what the focus is.