Hey jollyzolly,
Once again welcome to YC, and I look forward to hearing more pieces from you.
Regarding 'A Hero Rises', I honestly thought that the piece was excellent. I really like the introduction, but I think that you could build up the ending to a dramatic and bold climax. This song reminds me of alot of video-game music and it would easily fit into many of the recent and popular video-games. The strings work really well, considering you are using FL Studio (which I can never get to work ).
Anyway great piece and I look forward to hearing more great pieces from you