September 25, 201015 yr Composition for Orchestra. Second draft. Posted an earlier one, and hopefully improved it. Help me find a good title for it, please. A song with no name, is like a book with no cover. Untitled
September 25, 201015 yr That was beautiful It makes me think that I am outside chasing butterflies and bunnies and I stumble upon a peaceful land filled with butterflies and bunnies but suddenly a madman comes and destroys the land and abuses the bunnies and creatures and locks them up in cells. So I sneak into the prison and free them all. I sneak them passed the madman and gather everyone up to surprise attack the madman. We do it successfully and then everyone comes out and we all help clean the place up. Then everyone cheers and is happy again and I say good bye and go back home.
September 25, 201015 yr Just like Rayman FezzoMorte... A great book is a great book for its content, not for its title. Just name it what it is and a number. Or no number, or only a number - whatever you want. If you think a title has to be be added to make the listener get what you mean, than you obviously have not succeeded making that clear enough through your music alone. As this is not programmatic music, why bother the name other than for commercial sakes. The music: you made great use of setting different moods. The part D was nicely timed! I have three problems though, of which the first two are minor: 1) The third in the left hand of the piano in m9 was in too low a register, I would suggest changing the lowest C to a G a fifth above it, positioned between the C and E. Small intervals in low register give a muddy sound, which is not what you were after I think. Also, I am not totally sure on the D in the viola part in that same measure (m9). 2) I did not like m5-6 in the piano part. The general idea of a long held string note and pizz notes, a gentle flute part and the piano I liked very much, but the flow of the melody in the piano seemed a bit cliché and disjoined, of which the latter was the big badass. m1-4 were golden, but m5-6 were only nicely carved wood imo. I think you set the stage too high with m1-4 to be followed by m5-6 - in the piano that is. It took away a bit of the flow of the piece, which you may take for granted once you hear it a couple of times. This brings me to 3) There was something about your melodies in the part up to section D which hampered a nice flow. I think this is because of the varying lenght of your melodic material, and the onspinning character of it sometimes (like the flute part in m15-16). This was also harmonically at some places, where you either, if I may exaggerate a bit, 'bored' me (like m11-12) or 'surprised' me (like m44-45). Both not in too good a way. I have not seen your first draft, but this is becoming a solid piece. Nice job.
September 25, 201015 yr Composition for Orchestra. Second draft. Posted an earlier one, and hopefully improved it. Help me find a good title for it, please. A song with no name, is like a book with no cover. Untitled Absolute music. Title it what it is, what number it is of yours and what the prevailing key is. If you don't like that, title it by the name of the metronome marking (Adagio et Allegro maybe). Not all music needs a programmatic title. If you yourself don't feel a good title, then it probably doesn't need one. I like the stuff you have going on here especially in the first half. The counterpoint, the expressive sounds, the simple harmonies. I don't like the lack of percussion parts and the overwhelmingly thick scoring of the rhythmic ostinato around m.56. And please fix your collisions. The score is very clean except for a few things (trills, a couple "L.V." markings, a few hairpins). Also -After the initial opening, I think the flute could use the help of the rest of the WWs. -...you know, I don't want to be pushy or anything, but I think K is premature. I don't think you let the music do what it wanted to. I feel the music isn't done yet, that there's another section waiting to be explored after that stuff before it. You already gave us a tutti legati section like this. In addition to all of the energy you built up before and didn't really do anything with, the resulting effect is that the section before K is transitory, not concluding. If this is as long as you want it to go, I think the energy from the Allegro has to be released more effectively. I'm not going to pretend to be able to tell you how to do that, though. Oh, and first modulation...was pretty striking. You usually don't want modulations to be jolting. Thanks for sharing! As a work in progress, 8. As a finished piece, 6. Edited September 25, 201015 yr by Peter_W.
