[Voice Leading] Is This Ok?

This sounds ok to me but I don't really know if valid. The first beat is the end of the previous phrase, and the sudden change of key is purposeful. I'm worried about the octaves.

In the context of the classical style? No.

darn. what's the specific problem place though?

The parallel octaves are the problem places.

The parallel octaves are the problem places.

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thx

;_;

To avoid your octaves, you could delay the G in the bass while maintaining the same harmony. 

You could even add a passing note (A) between Bb and G. Just an idea!

Edited August 1, 201312 yr by ComposerByNight

i'd personally make the l.h. | chord rest rest Bb | D G F#

Oh man, if that isn't a glaring example of all things terrible. Are you trying to piss off Aloysius? Do you really think you could just get away with that scraggy?

m. 116 for those who are interested

http://www.youngcomposers.com/music/5169/rondo/