Optimistic (a piece for piano duet)

Wrote this piece recently for two pianos.

The melody is quite metronomic and repetitive, almost robotic perhaps?

My brain tends to favour these clockwork melody lines, as they seem to hook me into the piece; but I wonder if I should try to add more rhythmic variation?

The piece was built from a simple chord progression I was playing around with, and I added the melody to fit the chord sequence.

The melody doesn't sound robotic to me. What I can tell is that the excessive accentuation of every note like if you were hammering the piano perhaps makes the sound more "robotic" or "metallic" (not that this is necessarily bad), indeed some parts sound kind of "ethereal" to me, probably because of the high pitch notes you use to adorn the main melody. Would you mind sharing the score?

One thing I don't like so much is the end. It doesn't sound like an end to me (but hey, no worries it's just my humble opinion). What about adding an arpeggio or anything in C after the final F chord you have?

Why is it for two pianos? Well I can imagine but (sorry to insist) It'd be nice to see the score...

Kind regards, keep composing!
Daniel–Ømicrón.



 

Hi Daniel.

Many thanks for your analysis and review!

Here is the score. I haven't separated out the four hands yet: so this is generated straight from the MIDI file.

The chords are too big for one pianist, as I'm sure you guessed!