Each flame is a unique one

I imagined this theme under a bossfight against the antagonist of a videogame. In this piece I tryed to experiment with diminished chords, electrig guitar and with speed up and slow down metronome effect. I know that for a real battle theme percussion are important but unfortunately I'm a noob if we're talking about rythm, so pls give me some advise to improve.

Welcome to the forums!!

• First of all, do you have a pdf of this? 

Here's my advice anyway:
• From like 0:20 to the first minute of the song and after 1:20 it seems that you are trying to do some kind of question-answer structure but in my opinion it doesn't work because "Intervention by instrument 1" and "Intervention by instrument 2" feel unconnected. That also happened to me in my very first pieces. The end is abrupt and misleading to my ears. This is far from being what you want I suppose but I think the part between 0:53 approx. and 1:20 is what you are seeking for. If you were able to extend that atmosphere of cohesion which is also present before that strange final you made I think you'd have a very good piece in your hands. So in summary and of course from my sole perspective: The organ introduction is good. After that, you should forget about the guitar solo and proceed to the "core" of the piece which currently lasts just 20 secs and continue like this. The way you "end" before the real but strange end gives room to another round of cool music so consider making the theme larger and ending it properly.

The guitar + drums part has quite the rhythm but it seems to be material that could be used for another non-boss theme in the context of all the material you brought.

Hope my honest feedback serves you at least a little.

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

On 10/14/2022 at 2:01 PM, tizizicoblack said:

battle theme percussion

the section from 1:03 onward is very nice, i like the quickly changing atmospheres. i suggest continuing on with such for a while and then having a more dramatic ending, perhaps a crescendo or perhaps even better(?), a diminuendo...just something to round things off more effectively and not so abruptly (this not to suggest anything about the piece up to 1:30). 

thank you allf or the precious advises, this christmas I want to remix and improve this piece and I'll follow your observations. I'm sorry Omicronrg9 but i don't have the PDF, I even tried to convert it (cause the original file is in fl studio) but it came out as a mess. I'll go watch some videos about the form "question and answer". Ty guys