Violin n1

Hi @AndjelkaS,

Welcome to the forum!

Would you have the mp3 of the piece? I see in your score that the piece is quite agitated with all the fff markings and bowing each notes. Having an mp3 will help us get into the piece more!

For me the dynamic markings are sometimes quite weird here. You have several cresc. alongside with a decrescendo hairpin like in b.17 and 28, and a dim. with a crescendo hairpin in b.25. They are contradictry themselves.  Also, adding more dynamic contrast will be great instead of having the constant dynamic level fff since it can be tiring for listeners.

The 2nd ending marking in b.8 is unnecessary.

Also what is this piece about? Providing some background of the piece will for sure help us learn it more!

Thanks for sharing and joining!

Henry

It looks interesting and modern but as Henry says there are problems with the score. He's mentioned a couple. At the outset you have a diminuendo against a crescendo hairpin; the very first note (double stop) is a 1/32 (demisemiquaver) note with a pause above it. How long is the pause supposed to last? Why is the tempo not given above bar 1? You put in 80 over bar 2 which is confusing as bar 1 is marked allegro moderato

Is every note to be played detaché?

What are those zigzag lines beneath the staff in bar 12? (I've never come across that.)

What do the horizontal brackets beneath the staves mean? If these are signs uniquely for how to play your piece it's best to devote some space to explain them in text.

Lastly, some of the tie-ing needs looking at to make it easier to read.

Like Henry, I'd welcome an audio file.

G'day,

It is very hard to judge a piece without an MP3 but I'll try my best to go off the score your provided. 

First things first, as Henry has pointed out, the Dynamics are quite weirdly placed. The Fortississimo's above the declerendo could quite easily confuse a performer, and at times seem contradictory to what you seem to be intending. Also the dims over crescendos are very contradictory, and must be removed.

Secondly, the weird zig-zag lines and pedal marks? underneath the line are NOT symbols that appear in Violin music, unless you've got a specific technique in mind that you have chosen to depict. I'm also going to ask about the second time repeat on the first page which is very out of place with not a repeat bar line or first time repeat in sight.

Lastly, a lot of what you written seems impossible or insanely difficult to play based on what I can see. There are some massive intervalic leaps and falls in quick succession which would require constant shifting up and down the neck and string crossing, which combined with your dynamic markings, would be a massive challenge to play. 

This piece needs a lot of work, but I hope my feedback can help you improve it. 

Nga Mihi,

Arjuna