May 11, 20232 yr Hi @hw1234 @HtWinsor, Good to se you try imitation at the beginning! More of that will make the piece funnier! For me the progression of ii-I in b.17 and b.21 is not fluent. You can a ii-V-I there. Nice to see you have contrasting section featurimg relative minor in b.26 after a full close! Also nice to see in b.33 you finally feature piano! Make sure to feature it more as it's chamber music! The ending is satisfactory as well. Always to try to develop your materials though! Henry
May 22, 20232 yr I agree with everything Henry said. At the keyboard solo, instead of repeating the same notes over and over, maybe consider alternating them with an octave lower. You have scored this for Alto Recorder. Do you actually play the instrument? You've taken the recorder part up to B-flat above high C, which sounds fine electronically, but the truth is, the top note possible on the Alto is E above high C, unless you know some very fancy fingering to take it up another half octave. You may want either to take some of the higher passages down an octave, or rewrite the part for Soprano Recorder, which I believe has that B-flat above high C. Keep at it!
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