SorooshMHS Posted June 23, 2023 Share Posted June 23, 2023 Hey guys. I've been a guitarist for the majority of my life but composing for an orchestra is relatively new to me (I've been doing that for 2 years give or take). I wrote this piece a few months ago, and it has strings, woodwinds, piano, and some percussion. I hope you enjoy! I wasn't able to find the audio file so I'll post the Youtube link instead. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Samuel_vangogh Posted June 23, 2023 Share Posted June 23, 2023 (edited) Hey @SorooshMHS! Very well done! I like the mood and harmonies a lot! Its minded to be incidental music? It sounds like an ost. Here are some recommendations: - In sections that are more percussive (as in 0:48) i think that rythmic strings would fit more. Check https://youtu.be/243Uguc-6mQ 0:28 as an example of incidental music and https://youtu.be/QElT9KD4uX8 11:10 as an example of non incidental music. - This has some celtic vibes, maybe an alto flute or more exotic woodwinds would add a lot to the music. Check https://youtu.be/CrcWtQXlonw Herman Beeftink work's, you'll learn a lot about wind instrumentation. - If you share the score it would be easier for us to help you with harmonies, motives etc..., but you did pretty well melodic development here! Hope I helped! Samuel Edited June 23, 2023 by Samuel_vangogh 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SorooshMHS Posted June 24, 2023 Author Share Posted June 24, 2023 16 hours ago, Samuel_vangogh said: Hey @SorooshMHS! Very well done! I like the mood and harmonies a lot! Its minded to be incidental music? It sounds like an ost. Here are some recommendations: - In sections that are more percussive (as in 0:48) i think that rythmic strings would fit more. Check https://youtu.be/243Uguc-6mQ 0:28 as an example of incidental music and https://youtu.be/QElT9KD4uX8 11:10 as an example of non incidental music. - This has some celtic vibes, maybe an alto flute or more exotic woodwinds would add a lot to the music. Check https://youtu.be/CrcWtQXlonw Herman Beeftink work's, you'll learn a lot about wind instrumentation. - If you share the score it would be easier for us to help you with harmonies, motives etc..., but you did pretty well melodic development here! Hope I helped! Samuel Hi @Samuel_vangogh, thank you so much for the feedback, glad you liked my piece! Yes I'd say this was incidental music. I wrote it for a challenge in a music community I'm in, where this was the prompt: "Create a music piece that expresses the feeling of being lost in a dense forest, surrounded by towering trees and the sounds of nature. The piece should have a sense of wonder, awe, and maybe a touch of uncertainty. The melody should be slow and melodic, with the use of soft strings and woodwinds to evoke the serene atmosphere of the forest. Percussive elements should be added to mimic the sounds of rustling leaves and the occasional bird call. The piece should build to a climax, reaching a state of peaceful acceptance before slowly fading away, leaving the listener with a sense of being one with nature." - I see what you mean with the rhythmic strings, it might have made it a bit more interesting. I kept most of my piece fairly simple haha - Just listened to that Herman Beeftink piece, it's really nice. I've definitely got a lot to learn about orchestration and will check out more of his work. Interesting that you thought my piece had celtic vibes, I don't think I've ever actively listened to that stuff 😄 - I don't have a score (a staff notation score that is), as that's not how I write music. I use MIDI piano roll in a DAW, so I could send MIDI if that would help! Thank you so much, Soroosh 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Samuel_vangogh Posted June 24, 2023 Share Posted June 24, 2023 14 minutes ago, SorooshMHS said: on't have a score (a staff notation score that is), as that's not how I write music. I use MIDI piano roll in a DAW, so I could send MIDI if that would help! It think so, as most score programs are able to read midi as well Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SorooshMHS Posted June 24, 2023 Author Share Posted June 24, 2023 2 hours ago, Samuel_vangogh said: It think so, as most score programs are able to read midi as well alrighty. so the project tempo is 100, 6/4 time, and here are the MIDI files: https://www.dropbox.com/s/ip1g3gmuhol0e3y/EvergreenWaltzMIDI.zip?dl=0 (sorry if it's multiple files and a bit messy, I've never really done midi exporting like this before) 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Samuel_vangogh Posted June 24, 2023 Share Posted June 24, 2023 This is the score, its little bit laggy because its exported form a midi. From now on i will refer to the sheet music. PDF Evergreen Waltz by Soroosh 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Samuel_vangogh Posted June 24, 2023 Share Posted June 24, 2023 (edited) In bar 6: that Ab major chord sounds magical tto me, that chord doesnot make sense if we are thinking about D minor, but its easy to explain that chord as it is just cromatic notes, very well executed Bar 8, that F on a A7 chord may 'make the sonority muddy', idk if it was your intention. I love the harmonic progression in b15! When the oboe appears again with the melody in b23, its the same, maybe some melodic development or another harmonies would work as well, try writting an unexpected chord, this will add a lot of richness to the sonority. Also, try using dorian or mixolydian scales, they will help construct a more forestry sonority Edited June 24, 2023 by Samuel_vangogh 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted June 24, 2023 Share Posted June 24, 2023 Hi @SorooshMHS, Welcome to YC and thanks for joining us! The piece is indeed beautiful. I agree with many things @Samuel_vangogh mentioned so I'm not going to repeat his points! I love the phyrgian mode in b.14 with the Eb, but I find its clash with E natural somewhat off. 1 hour ago, Samuel_vangogh said: Also, try using dorian or mixolydian scales, they will help construct a more forestry sonority I think Soroosh does use the dorian scale, e.g. in b.16 with that E-B-E chord. I like in b.15-22 during similar passages you're alternating the chords with that dorian chord and the F minor (another octatonically related key!). 1 hour ago, Samuel_vangogh said: In bar 6: that Ab major chord sounds magical tto me, that chord doesnot make sense if we are thinking about D minor, but its easy to explain that chord as it is just cromatic notes, very well executed Yup I agree with Samuel that the chord is chord is beautiful. Using octatonically related keys can be really beautiful sometimes! 1 hour ago, Samuel_vangogh said: When the oboe appears again with the melody in b23, its the same, maybe some melodic development or another harmonies would work as well, try writting an unexpected chord, this will add a lot of richness to the sonority. I agree with Samuel again. Besides his suggestion, using the B minor chord will be great too as it's the only octatonically key not being used here! But maybe for an incidental music the variety is enough here. Remember to check out our other members' posts and review them! Henry 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SorooshMHS Posted June 24, 2023 Author Share Posted June 24, 2023 (edited) 2 hours ago, Samuel_vangogh said: In bar 6: that Ab major chord sounds magical tto me, that chord doesnot make sense if we are thinking about D minor, but its easy to explain that chord as it is just cromatic notes, very well executed Bar 8, that F on a A7 chord may 'make the sonority muddy', idk if it was your intention. I love the harmonic progression in b15! When the oboe appears again with the melody in b23, its the same, maybe some melodic development or another harmonies would work as well, try writting an unexpected chord, this will add a lot of richness to the sonority. Also, try using dorian or mixolydian scales, they will help construct a more forestry sonority Thank you Samuel for the feedback and the score! b6: thank you, I love me a good bV chord (that's how i think of it at least), especially in an aeolian/minor context b8: good ear. that does clash, but i never really noticed it. I think it's because the E in the chord is being played with the pizzicato cello so it doesn't sustain enough to make it immediately noticeable with the sustaining F note in the viola b15: thank you, i'm pretty happy with that part! b23: I agree, I will say I kind of copy pasted that section. the only things i added were a few more untuned percussion hits, and doubling the pizzicato cello with the piano. I'm more of a songwriter than composer (I'm not classically trained either) so that's something I tend to do. It could definitely use some development. I don't think I used mixolydian but I did borrow a G chord (which would be the IV in relation to D minor) from the parallel dorian. But yes, I didn't do a full on dorian section. Edited June 24, 2023 by SorooshMHS Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SorooshMHS Posted June 24, 2023 Author Share Posted June 24, 2023 (edited) 59 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Hi @SorooshMHS, Welcome to YC and thanks for joining us! The piece is indeed beautiful. I agree with many things @Samuel_vangogh mentioned so I'm not going to repeat his points! I love the phyrgian mode in b.14 with the Eb, but I find its clash with E natural somewhat off. I think Soroosh does use the dorian scale, e.g. in b.16 with that E-B-E chord. I like in b.15-22 during similar passages you're alternating the chords with that dorian chord and the F minor (another octatonically related key!). Yup I agree with Samuel that the chord is chord is beautiful. Using octatonically related keys can be really beautiful sometimes! I agree with Samuel again. Besides his suggestion, using the B minor chord will be great too as it's the only octatonically key not being used here! But maybe for an incidental music the variety is enough here. Remember to check out our other members' posts and review them! Henry Hi Henry, thank you! b14: I see what you're saying. The Eb does clash a bit with the D in the pizzicato cello a bit. I did borrow a chord from D dorian indeed, I really like the sound of a major IV chord in a minor context, there's something majestic about it. About the Fm, I think of that as a chromatic mediant, which is a concept I've been exploring a lot lately. Bm would be an interesting chord to try as well. If I'm not mistaking, that would be another chromatic mediant actually! I'll make sure to check out other members' posts as well. Like I said earlier, I'm not classically trained so my feedback might not be that useful for classical influenced music but I will give it a go 🙂 Thanks, Soroosh Edited June 24, 2023 by SorooshMHS 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted June 24, 2023 Share Posted June 24, 2023 23 minutes ago, SorooshMHS said: b14: I see what you're saying. The Eb does clash a bit with the D in the pizzicato cello a bit. Yeah, and the Eb also clash with the E natural by the oboe in the last crotchet. 25 minutes ago, SorooshMHS said: About the Fm, I think of that as a chromatic mediant, which is a concept I've been exploring a lot lately. That's a great try! 26 minutes ago, SorooshMHS said: Bm would be an interesting chord to try as well. If I'm not mistaking, that would be another chromatic mediant actually! Yeah they are all related within the same octatonic scale: D-E-F-G-Ab-Bb-B natural-C# and back to D, with D-E-F as D minor, F-G-Ab as F minor, Ab-Bb-B natural(Cb) as Ab minor, and B-C#-D as B minor. 28 minutes ago, SorooshMHS said: I'll make sure to check out other members' posts as well. Like I said earlier, I'm not classically trained so my feedback might not be that useful for classical influenced music but I will give it a go 🙂 Thanks! Even a comment like "I love the piece" will help!! Henry 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SorooshMHS Posted June 24, 2023 Author Share Posted June 24, 2023 2 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Yeah, and the Eb also clash with the E natural by the oboe in the last crotchet. Ahh yeah that too, just saw that 2 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Yeah they are all related within the same octatonic scale: D-E-F-G-Ab-Bb-B natural-C# and back to D, with D-E-F as D minor, F-G-Ab as F minor, Ab-Bb-B natural(Cb) as Ab minor, and B-C#-D as B minor That's a really interesting way of thinking about it. So if I understand correctly, you're taking the first 3 notes from the scales you mentioned, and putting them together to form a scale. Very interesting. I don't really know anything about octatonic scales, so I will look into that 4 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Thanks! Even a comment like "I love the piece" will help!! For sure! Thanks, Soroosh 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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