A derby in the clouds

Hello, I began working on a piece that is supposed to depict a derby in the clouds hence the title. It’s supposed to be a quick energetic yet melodic piece, and I’m just at a checkpoint to get feedback before continuing. Let me know if the beginning is a little too harsh I plan on revising that. Also any constructive criticism is welcome. 
 

thanks in advance

Hi @Hc123,

On 9/19/2023 at 10:34 AM, Hc123 said:

Hello, I began working on a piece that is supposed to depict a derby in the clouds hence the title. It’s supposed to be a quick energetic yet melodic piece, and I’m just at a checkpoint to get feedback before continuing. Let me know if the beginning is a little too harsh I plan on revising that. Also any constructive criticism is welcome. 

I don't think the opening is harsh at all. The solo horn section in 1:29 seems a bit too dry for me, maybe adding strings pizz. with bassoon accompaniment will be great. The solo flute section around ~2:40 seems dry too and I'm sure you will add accompaniments to it. The D major chord in 3:57 seems too abrupt for me with no preparation.

Thx for sharing!

Henry