Ben Callender Posted December 15, 2023 Share Posted December 15, 2023 This is a nocturne inspired by the death of my grandfather, whom I was very close with. I wrote this when I was 15. Youtube with score Nocturne_Op9_20230706_202850.mid MP3 Play / pause JavaScript is required. 0:00 0:00 volume > next menu Nocturne_Op9_20231215_072917 > next 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted December 15, 2023 Share Posted December 15, 2023 This is a very mature and affecting nocturne for a 15 year old to have written! Great job - I'm impressed! It conveys the sweet memories you must have shared with your late grandfather as well as revealing a very deep mourning for your grandfather symbolized by those G minor major 7th chords. You have my sympathies and thanks for sharing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GospelPiano12 Posted December 20, 2023 Share Posted December 20, 2023 I really enjoyed listening to this piece - your piece is very pianistic, something that after listening to this piece and a few others on your YT channel, makes sense - it's very in line with your style. One critique I'll give you is that the notation program you're using is holding you down. Your piece would sound a lot stronger if the playback was a lot smoother (it is incredibly strong as is, the strength comes across despite the playback). Maybe try having a recording of you playing the piece, with the score on the screen? Overall, this is a very strong piece and I encourage you to keep writing, and playing - as a pianist-composer, I can say the more piano/keyboard proficiency you have, the better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted December 20, 2023 Share Posted December 20, 2023 Hi @Ben Callender, As Peter mentioned I love the opening chord, as well as those dissonant chords! The 0:45 section shows some warmth which should be the great moments you share with your grandfather. The modulation from G major to B minor to G minor is lovely. I also love the section with the triplets, but I have maybe you can tone down the virtuosic passages a bit! Thx for sharing! Henry 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aw Ke Shen Posted December 23, 2023 Share Posted December 23, 2023 (edited) Lovely piece! I also like the dissonant chords too, and on top of those, the diminished chords as well. On the notation end, I can also suggest ( if possible ) to use octave lines/ change of clefs for some parts for score readability. Edited December 28, 2023 by Aw Ke Shen 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jqh73o Posted December 27, 2023 Share Posted December 27, 2023 This piece reminds me of early Scriabin and late chopin I really like the contrast between the tender and sorrowful sections with the more dramatic parts and the contemplative pauses with the sudden fits of rage all in the same piece I agree with @GospelPiano12 when he said that your music notation software is holding you down, I think other music notation software will help you a lot. I think this is just my personal taste, but I think that the last textural transition is too sudden 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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