A mostly simple and "fun" short piece for the piano

Any feedback and/or comments are appreciated! I wish to play it myself and put the recording here as the computer generated version is not bringing out certain elements that I thought of while playing, and I'll try to do that soon. Who are you? (Track 3).pdf

I love it, sound like a bartok but in a jazzy "children songs" of chick corea lydian sonority. I think it evolves very well, always interesting to keep listening it till the abrupt end. Thanks for sharing it 👍.

2 hours ago, Wastavino said:

I love it, sound like a bartok but in a jazzy "children songs" of chick corea lydian sonority. I think it evolves very well, always interesting to keep listening it till the abrupt end. Thanks for sharing it 👍.

 

Thank you, I am glad you like it!

Hi @piajo,

I really like those funny chords like quartal and quintal chords, and surprisingly colourful modulations , really reminds me some Japanese anime! I love the ending too. The abrupt end on a supersonic chord is so funny. Thx for sharing!

Henry

5 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hi @piajo,

I really like those funny chords like quartal and quintal chords, and surprisingly colourful modulations , really reminds me some Japanese anime! I love the ending too. The abrupt end on a supersonic chord is so funny. Thx for sharing!

Henry

 

Ooh I like the mention of anime. Thank you, I am very glad you like it!

Yup, it does morphs from a

On 12/19/2023 at 10:01 AM, Wastavino said:

bartok but in a jazzy "children songs" of chick corea lydian sonority

to something of a

On 12/19/2023 at 10:05 PM, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Japanese anime

I ,however, don't quite find the ending that abrupt, esp since many parts of the piece are somewhat abrupt anyways - so the abruptness is ironically expected. For me, the abruptness comes less from the rhythm and more from the ending chord.

Maybe I'd suggest notating:

a crotchet rest for boths hands for the second beat of bar 18

a minum rest for left hand for bars 48 and 50

a minum rest for right hand for bar 66

A short, nice piece! Thanks for sharing!

On 12/18/2023 at 12:40 PM, piajo said:

I wish to play it myself and put the recording here as the computer generated version is not bringing out certain elements that I thought of while playing, and I'll try to do that soon. 

Hope this comes to a reality!

Hi piajo. This piece has certainly a lot of unique character and energy. I liked the first section specially, it's a bit subtle, more of my taste than the next section (more energetic and relentless) that I liked anyway. As other composers mentioned, the transition you do from one "style" to another is notorious but not unpleasant. I would say there's room for improvement, or balance perhaps? Essentially: 

I would have liked more (development) of the red without jumping straight into the blue. But these are details, and I did enjoy your piece a lot. I hope you get to record it and publish it here!

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

5 hours ago, Aw Ke Shen said:

Maybe I'd suggest notating:

a crotchet rest for boths hands for the second beat of bar 18

a minum rest for left hand for bars 48 and 50

a minum rest for right hand for bar 66

 

A short, nice piece! Thanks for sharing!

Thank you for the suggestion, I will try it out, and I am very glad you like it!

49 minutes ago, Omicronrg9 said:

I would have liked more (development) of the red without jumping straight into the blue. But these are details, and I did enjoy your piece a lot. I hope you get to record it and publish it here!

Ahh I see. I also thought the same initially, then I thought maybe it works to give the effect I want, but a transition would be better after all! Thank you very much! Since this is not difficult to play I could have recorded it, but I am too lazy for my own good.