Ceral no 1

Hi this is a piano piece I'm working on, it's almost done and needs some touching up. It uses a set. Would love feedback and thoughts on it. 

Hey @Rafael Avila!

Thanks for posting this here!  I enjoyed some of the harmonies created by this set!  The set itself is interesting being created by two 5ths a half step apart (A, Bb, E, F).  I think the piece sounds kind of strange sometimes at points where there's strong consonances where I would expect a dissonance (like at bar 14, beat 2).  Also, this is a good experiment in using a set (presumably the first time you've tried writing a piece using a set?).  But it does come off kind of like an exercise because of the constant, mechanical and metronomic pulse and almost exclusive use of only 8th notes and quarter notes.  You have a ritardando towards the last chord which does function well to make the piece feel like it concludes well (and the last chord is also pretty cool - a Bb maj7 #11)!  But the rest of the piece kind of ambles along at a constant unchanging tempo which feels very pedestrian.  There are so many more individual musical gestures to be made using triplets and more complex rhythms and quicker or accelerating and decelerating note values.  I just feel like there is so much more experimentation to be made here - but it's definitely a good first try at a piece using a set!  Thanks for sharing!

33 minutes ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Hey @Rafael Avila!

Thanks for posting this here!  I enjoyed some of the harmonies created by this set!  The set itself is interesting being created by two 5ths a half step apart (A, Bb, E, F).  I think the piece sounds kind of strange sometimes at points where there's strong consonances where I would expect a dissonance (like at bar 14, beat 2).  Also, this is a good experiment in using a set (presumably the first time you've tried writing a piece using a set?).  But it does come off kind of like an exercise because of the constant, mechanical and metronomic pulse and almost exclusive use of only 8th notes and quarter notes.  You have a ritardando towards the last chord which does function well to make the piece feel like it concludes well (and the last chord is also pretty cool - a Bb maj7 #11)!  But the rest of the piece kind of ambles along at a constant unchanging tempo which feels very pedestrian.  There are so many more individual musical gestures to be made using triplets and more complex rhythms and quicker or accelerating and decelerating note values.  I just feel like there is so much more experimentation to be made here - but it's definitely a good first try at a piece using a set!  Thanks for sharing!

 

Yeah that chord i was wanting to change in bar 14. As for experimenting with rhythm I sorta kept it simple just cuz I don't really have lots of experince playing this type of music. Right now I'm learning Schoenburgs op11 so hopefully some of his ideas rub off on me. I usually write what I can play but even still I think I could've added triplets or sixteenth notes at the least to vary it. I'll see about adding more experimentation in terms of rhythm.