BlackkBeethoven Posted October 16 Author Posted October 16 Any feedback or ideas on ways to help me continue developing the piece? Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted October 16 Posted October 16 To critique these fragments so far as a piece of music: In the beginning, I can't hear the bassoon part. In general the whole piece sounds like it's being played either too fast, or it's too metronomic and mechanical and could maybe use some rubato. You've balanced all the instruments at the same dynamic - the melody should be balanced in high-relief above the rest of the voices and I think it would bring a much more musical impression. Those are the things that jump out at me as getting in the way of giving the music a more fair appraisal and of really being able to hear how good or bad it really is. It does seem like the intro is a bit meandering, but I can't tell without any accompaniment or even just hearing the bassoon part might help. But I do really like the structure so far of having the strings and Flute come in first, before the Oboe takes center stage. Looking good so far! Thanks for sharing. Quote
BlackkBeethoven Posted October 19 Author Posted October 19 On 10/16/2025 at 12:49 AM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: In the beginning, I can't hear the bassoon part. It is possible that I had it muted in the mixer lol On 10/16/2025 at 12:49 AM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: In general the whole piece sounds like it's being played either too fast, or it's too metronomic and mechanical and could maybe use some rubato. I agree, but I'm not exactly sure how to add rubato in on muscscore On 10/16/2025 at 12:49 AM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: You've balanced all the instruments at the same dynamic - the melody should be balanced in high-relief above the rest of the voices and I think it would bring a much more musical impression. Yes, still working on this and deciding what dynamics I want where On 10/16/2025 at 12:49 AM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: hear how good or bad it really is. Yikes lol I appreciate the feedback; the piece definitely needs more work. I would love to write some more melodic material, but I love that theme so much that it's hard for me to write new stuff without being drawn back to the same intervals and the same lines. 1 Quote
BlackkBeethoven Posted Tuesday at 05:57 AM Author Posted Tuesday at 05:57 AM (edited) Dramatic chord change from the key of Fm and Dbm/C#m? The change will be happening under a sustained tone, and Ab is that sustained tone... Any thoughts? Edited Tuesday at 05:57 AM by BlackkBeethoven Quote
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted Tuesday at 06:09 AM Posted Tuesday at 06:09 AM 11 minutes ago, BlackkBeethoven said: Dramatic chord change from the key of Fm and Dbm/C#m? The change will be happening under a sustained tone, and Ab is that sustained tone... Any thoughts? Yeah it's easy to modulate from C# minor back, just through D flat major and then F minor! Quote
BlackkBeethoven Posted Tuesday at 06:25 AM Author Posted Tuesday at 06:25 AM 15 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Yeah it's easy to modulate from C# minor back, just through D flat major and then F minor! I want to go from Fm to C#m, though Quote
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted Tuesday at 06:37 AM Posted Tuesday at 06:37 AM 12 minutes ago, BlackkBeethoven said: 28 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said: Yeah it's easy to modulate from C# minor back, just through D flat major and then F minor! I want to go from Fm to C#m, though Still easy, though 1 Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted yesterday at 03:07 AM Posted yesterday at 03:07 AM On 11/17/2025 at 9:57 PM, BlackkBeethoven said: Dramatic chord change from the key of Fm and Dbm/C#m? The change will be happening under a sustained tone, and Ab is that sustained tone... Any thoughts? I think that's a good plan considering that the Ab note is a chord tone in both Fm and Dbm. But I do hope that during the Ab pedal note, the harmony that smoothly leads you from F to Db includes some dissonances with the Ab. Quote
BlackkBeethoven Posted 3 hours ago Author Posted 3 hours ago On 11/20/2025 at 10:07 PM, PeterthePapercomPoser said: But I do hope that during the Ab pedal note, the harmony that smoothly leads you from F to Db includes some dissonances with the Ab. Hmm, why is that? I was thinking about bringing in some NRT and going AbM-EbM/G-Gbmaj9-Dbm But not exactly sure how I should orchestrate that, b/c I liked it on the piano, but in the strings, it's kind of wonky lol Quote
BlackkBeethoven Posted 3 hours ago Author Posted 3 hours ago I LOVE the section with the triplets Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted 1 hour ago Posted 1 hour ago 2 hours ago, BlackkBeethoven said: Hmm, why is that? To me, the whole point of having a pedal tone over some changes is that at some point or another it becomes a non-harmonic tone in relation to the harmony which brings in some nice dissonant color. But your plan of having AbM-EbM/G-Gbmaj9-Dbm works because the G's and Gb's are dissonant with Ab. Now, the only thing that puzzles me is .. why did you take the trouble of modulating to Db minor if you immediately go back to Ab major? I thought you were going to stay in the Db minor key longer to introduce a contrasting theme or something? Quote
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