Jesus was Born this Day

@Vonias Wow, I didn’t know your church would be singing it! What an honor.

In that case, I’d like to offer my feedback if you’ll accept it. I really like the beginning section in mood, and I like how it’s more tonal than what you put into the AI. When I listened to it first, I thought the beginning Ooh’s were a non-lyrical version of the first verse of a hymn. Looking back they’re not, but if you made them so I think that would be a lovely beginning and certainly in style in the choral atmosphere I’m a part of. It’s like a precursor of what’s to come.

If you were to go in and edit this, the biggest thing I think you should work on is the form. The first section is only 6 bars and doesn’t quite end on a rhyme scheme. I would recommend making it 8 bars and rhyme, in a period or sentence form if you can make it (those are the two clearest, most liked forms). Then go into the final section and make it similar 8 bars, but more final. Then you can end on an Amen if you’d like, and the whole would sound more fitting and like each part relates to each other.

As a minor thing, I think having piano the whole time would be fitting for a more contemporary sounding piece.

I don’t quite know what you’re asking about tradition, but I don’t think starting with an amen, or singing an aeuouae “Ah eh ooh oh ooh…” on a descant would make much sense musically, so I think the tradition in those two areas is fitting and helpful. I don’t think tradition is the only or best way on its own, but when it proves its own principles, I think you get a higher quality result when sticking to it.

Would you mind checking out my piece and offering some feedback please?