4 hours ago4 hr Like clock work version 2.mp3version 2.pdfHey. Any chances of getting critique on this composition?Thanks in advance.Some personal things i noticed:Overused rhythm – Effective but repetitive; lacks contrast and becomes monotonous.Sections that don’t fit – Some passages sound good on their own but feel disconnected from the main idea.Ideas needing polishing – Certain motifs or sections need refinement so they integrate better into the overall structure and narrative of the piece.Too much tension There is too much tension in the piece. It needs more release here and there.The main lead could be stronger and more interesting The main idea is pretty good but it is repetitive from the first round to the second round.Awkward transitions There is a few places where there are awkward transitions that needs to be fixed.more modulation The piece stays too much within the same key. Edited 1 hour ago1 hr by Bjarke
1 hour ago1 hr Hey @Bjarke !Nice job on this one! It's full of vitality and forward-driving energy! I love it! I don't find any part of it boring and can easily listen to it over and over. To me it doesn't sound so much like clockwork but more like a Spring piece with it's liveliness and exuberance. It doesn't sound mechanical to me. For me, for it to be a piece about clockwork it would have to contain some sense of ticking mechanicality. It's also not the right tempo to sound like a clock. Doesn't matter though, as I think you've created a great piece of music here! Great job and thanks for sharing!P.S.: My only nitpick would perhaps be to have notated this in 6/8, 9/8 or 12/8 as it would become easier to read imo.
28 minutes ago28 min Author Thanks a lot for your comment I made a few adjustments in a newer polished version @PeterthePapercomPoserLike clock work version 2.2 05-04-2026 - Flow 1.mp3version 2 refined.pdf
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