Piano Ballad

Hey there!

I am new to this forum and would like to present my piano ballad (version 86).

It was critized strongly in another forum, mainly because of the piano melody.

The piece isn't completed in full. From 1:53 on the dynamics of the topline strings

aren't edited yet. Because of the many critics I composed 3 new piano melodys (version 90,96,101).

What is your hearing impression? How do you find the 3 melodys?

Could you tell me, for example, what kind of criticisms you received?

Personally, I think it’s good overall!! If I had to point something out, I’d say the melodic phrasing feels a bit similar throughout, which makes the development feel a little thin. Among the new melodies, I really like measure 90. Personally, I thought it might be interesting to try swapping the left-hand accompaniment of 90 with something like what's in measure 96!

By the way, if you don't mind, could you tell me the name of that forum? I’d love to take a look myself.

1 hour ago, Nd-6829 said:

Could you tell me, for example, what kind of criticisms you received?

Personally, I think it’s good overall!! If I had to point something out, I’d say the melodic phrasing feels a bit similar throughout, which makes the development feel a little thin. Among the new melodies, I really like measure 90. Personally, I thought it might be interesting to try swapping the left-hand accompaniment of 90 with something like what's in measure 96!

By the way, if you don't mind, could you tell me the name of that forum? I’d love to take a look myself.

It's a German forum. They said things like:"There is no melody." "That's just tinkling." "I can't sing to this melody."

32 minutes ago, Sera Cinematic Music said:

It's a German forum. They said things like:"There is no melody." "That's just tinkling." "I can't sing to this melody."

Really? That sounds like a very harsh critique. To be truthful, I think your work is good; it simply reflects your good style. Your melodies have a certain melancholic quality, yet they still feel energetic and full of hope—Specifically, in version 80, the first 27 seconds have a bit of a lonely, melancholic atmosphere. But starting with the note at 0:28, it feels as if the music begins to take a step forward with a sense of hope. It’s hard to put into words, but that’s the impression I get. Whether that was intentional or not, your music is capable of telling a story, and I think that’s great. I’m also interested to hear how others feel about it, not just me.

Edited 1 hour ago1 hr by Nd-6829