"Unread Letters" - Kyle Hilton (UncleRed99) Seeking feedback for improvement

The idea for this composition was inspired by @MK_Piano, after he sent me some footage of himself improvising in C minor on piano. I asked him if I could write something inspired by what he played, and was graciously allowed to do so.

The piece utilizes a steady quarter note / eighth note moving rhythm and melody that symbolizes the passing of time during, and the emotional feelings felt in periods of contemplation, longing, rumination, and/or sorrowful reflection.

Although, I feel as though it may be a bit too repetative, despite having variation in both rhythm, chord voicing, chord progression choice, including a modulation towards the end. I'm seeking to build upon the ideas I have in this score, more effectively. Any suggestions are welcome :)

Unread Letters.pdf

This is really lovely! I especially love the melodic ideas.
However, I agree that it feels a little repetitive at times, particularly before 3:22. I listened without the score, so I can't give much feedback on the harmony itself.

From a listener's perspective, I think the piece could benefit from a few more changes in texture here and there. Nothing too obvious, so as not to disrupt the contemplative mood. For example, I really loved the change of texture at 3:22. More moments like that, might help reduce the sense of repetition while still maintaining its contemplative flow.

In particular, at 1:52, I found myself wanting to hear the melody an octave higher (perhaps doubled in octaves). As it stands, it presents a variation of the main theme in the same register, and my ears were asking for a change in tessitura at that point.

This is really beautiful and an orchestral version would be so beautiful too! Orchestrating it would also give you lots of chances to add variety with the instrumental colors.

Thanks for sharing!

14 hours ago, JorgeDavid said:

This is really lovely! I especially love the melodic ideas.
However, I agree that it feels a little repetitive at times, particularly before 3:22. I listened without the score, so I can't give much feedback on the harmony itself.

From a listener's perspective, I think the piece could benefit from a few more changes in texture here and there. Nothing too obvious, so as not to disrupt the contemplative mood. For example, I really loved the change of texture at 3:22. More moments like that, might help reduce the sense of repetition while still maintaining its contemplative flow.

In particular, at 1:52, I found myself wanting to hear the melody an octave higher (perhaps doubled in octaves). As it stands, it presents a variation of the main theme in the same register, and my ears were asking for a change in tessitura at that point.

This is really beautiful and an orchestral version would be so beautiful too! Orchestrating it would also give you lots of chances to add variety with the instrumental colors.

Thanks for sharing!

Thank you for your feedback! And I'm glad it was overall enjoyable to you :)

I have one question though... When you say "Change of Texture at 3:22" are you referring to the Key change? And that you suggest that there should be more modulations? I fear modulating too much may throw listeners for a loop, no?