My second piano piece ever! (Unfinished)

HanselandGretel_unfin2.pdf

Hello gooberro and welcome to YC! I am honestly surprised that no one has given you feedback yet and this is your second piece, as it has a surprisingly high level of quality with interesting progressions and good themes. I appreciate your work very much.

Thank you! I don’t know if there’s a reply button, but this works. I just really tried to capture the kids playfulness with the evil stepmother, and the fog of the forest. For the directions I tried to use detailed ones to enhance the depth of the piece. 😁

Hello gooberro!
This piece feels like it's portraying mysterious characters.
It's a nice work, and each section feels like a different character or a different scene being depicted.
Personally, I like how it ends.

You mentioned it's unfinished, but which part specifically?
As a small piece of advice, I feel like when you post a piece, if you include a bit of the background story or specify what kind of feedback you're looking for, people tend to react to it more.
Not everyone is like that, but I think that's generally how it goes.
Though I'm not really one to talk.

Best,

Lithl.

8 hours ago, Lithl said:

Hello gooberro!
This piece feels like it's portraying mysterious characters.
It's a nice work, and each section feels like a different character or a different scene being depicted.
Personally, I like how it ends.

You mentioned it's unfinished, but which part specifically?
As a small piece of advice, I feel like when you post a piece, if you include a bit of the background story or specify what kind of feedback you're looking for, people tend to react to it more.
Not everyone is like that, but I think that's generally how it goes.
Though I'm not really one to talk.

Best,

Lithl

Hi, Lithl

Thanks for the feedback. I am still getting used to both the forum and Musescore so that’s why the storyline wasn’t explicitly there.

So far, I have the:

Children playing - first part

Evil stepmother - second part

Banished to the forest - third part

Finding the house - fourth part

After the huge B chord, at “p subito”, the right hand being eventually joined by the left hand is them seeing the witch.

Parts I need to finish:

The witch actually trapping them

Children fight back

The witch gets cooked (literally) and the children escape

Finale

I’m working on them! Plus, only one school week to go until summer break!!