The Old Man and the Sea

This is my latest piece, created based on Hemingway's "The Old Man and the Sea". I write various types of music that may be in demand primarily in the film industry, for soundtracks. If anyone is interested, please write to me. My music is also released on vinyl records.

1.⁠ ⁠Overture 00:00

2.⁠ ⁠The Old Man and the Boy 03:19

3.⁠ ⁠Hope 06:54

4.⁠ ⁠The Fish 10:56

5.⁠ ⁠The Sharks 12:24

6.⁠ ⁠Despair 14:22

7.⁠ ⁠Unbroken, Dreaming of Lions 15:57

Edited yesterday at 09:34 PM1 day by Mamuka Chkheidze

Hello @Mamuka Chkheidze and welcome to the forum!

Do you have a score of this piece? It would help greatly to allow us to review it! Thanks!

3 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Привет@Mamuka ChkheidzeДобро пожаловать на форум!

У вас есть партитура этого произведения? Было бы очень полезно, если бы вы позволили нам ознакомиться с ней! Спасибо!

Of course I have one. I work in Studio One with MIDI files, and I can print out the score as well. This evening I'll export an excerpt and drop it in here

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Edited 8 hours ago8 hr by Mamuka Chkheidze

9 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Привет@Mamuka ChkheidzeДобро пожаловать на форум!

У вас есть партитура этого произведения? Было бы очень полезно, если бы вы позволили нам ознакомиться с ней! Спасибо!

“This is the score for the first movement (the overture). Please note that the strings are not divided into first and second violins, violas, and cellos (that is, in the table they are printed under a single name and given together, because technically I don’t need that at this stage, before a live orchestra performs it). Also, for example, there are two harps because they are recorded on different tracks, so that when I use the faders the sound comes out the way I want. For example, I also haven’t set up the alto clef (viola clef), and so on. And naturally, there is a lot of work to be done in the program to separate out the faders, which I also don’t need at this stage, before there is a live orchestra, and so on. In short, this is practically just the notation score.

What’s more... I live in Georgia, and everything I’m writing now, I’m writing with Google Translate, because I practically don’t know English. If Google translated anything in a confusing way, I apologize on its behalf :)”

The old man and the sea.pdf

Hi Mr. Chkheidze, welcome to our forums.

The overture sounds wonderful, as well as the second movement, but I was revising the score of the first movement you submitted and I see that it gets cut off. In the last page (78) you can see it clearly. I suppose that it goes attacca but if it does, I have no way to know just from the score alone. It seems like the movement does not finish there. My suggestion —in case it was cut off— would be trying to export it as A3 or even bigger paper so there's enough space. It's true that even in that case, it's not easy to follow a score of such dimension. If this was not cut off, I would suggest a double bar at the end or a double final bar, marking "attacca subito" if you intend to keep going to the second movement without pause. Maybe you do know about this, but just in case!

That you release this (or the final, recorded product, I suppose) in Vinyl is surprising to me, just as a note. Is it costly?


Now on the piece itself, I would say that you have a lot of ideas, and you sure know how to make bombastic stuff that could fit very well in a soundtrack. I normally listen to the works twice or thrice before emitting some judgement, because often a single listen is not enough for me to grasp enough details or places I would like to stop and comment. While writing this comment I'm listening to the work for the second time and as I progress in the piece I see that this great music you have brought us may err on the side of excess, in my humble opinion.

Excess of bombastic fortissimo moments, of tutti, of fast contrasts, and of lack of elements that would make the piece be perceived as a whole. Of course, there are very good transitions too, like the one you do from movement 2 to movement 3, and a whole lot of enjoyable moments, but I don't really get the impression of listening to a cohesive multi-movemented work, but at well crafted environments or atmospheres, or even excerpts of music that do share instrumentation in common and that would, as you suggest, work as part of some cinematic product.

There is, in my opinion again, A LOT of material here that could be further developed to make a whole suite of itself.

Finally, I hope the translator doesn't fail. My favourite part of this work is undoubtedly the clarinet solo part on movement 7. It reminded me a lot of "E lucevan le stelle" from Puccini https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YAXE-lczgu4

Many thanks for submitting your work here.

Best regards,
Daniel–Ø.