November 19, 200520 yr Hey all, This piece was very fun to write, because it is in 5/8. It took me a long while to write it, compared to my other pieces. However, i don't think that i placed enough emphasis on the beat groupings of 5/8 but oh well i think its cool. I like the change to the second theme though, but let me know what you think. The second piece is a chaconne based on a little 4 bar theme going through the chords (in Gmaj) I, VI, V, IV Let me know what your impressions/suggestions are, please ;) Symphony_no_1.MUS Symphony_no_1.MID 1._Wind_Quintet_in_E_min___Dance.mid 2._Wind_Quintet_in_E_min___Chaconne.mid
November 20, 200520 yr Hey, this is very neat stuff!! i love the melodies and the insturmentation is pure genius! The first one (dance) has suhe amazing melodies and you did wonders with so little instruments! i really loved every bit of the piece and i'll listen to it over and over again for sure! the only remark i could say is that i found the passage between the melodies at measures 20-21 a little out-of place, maybe you should check it. The chaconne is AMAZING! complex but SO beautiful! if it were a minute longer i'd start crying and i never cried to any piece!!! speaking of ending... are you sure you want it to end this way...? im the face of the amazing melodies from before the ending looks really silly.... i'd change it if i were you... one small recomandmet too - measure 40 seemd to static, mosly because it's in the middle of the melody. Other than that this is a piece of increadible beuaty and it would be a shame to leave the ending like this. You are a great composer, good job!! :(
November 20, 200520 yr Yes, the groupings in your first movement are off a bit. I don't feel 5/8 pretty much at all. I think you have a couple of notes in there that don't mean to be. I suggest you got through this piece and see exactly what each note is doing there, and examine why, and if you should get rid of it or not. Remember- not every instrument has to be playing to make a full sound! A couple trios and duets here and there won't hurt! I think the end of the 1st movement happens rather oddly...it kind of drags on, and there is no real climax. I suggest dissecting the piece, and writing down an outline. From there, form something that flows better, with clear-cut expositions of themes and developments, and a climax. What you have here is good, but the flow is off. There are some sections that seem out of place. It's your job to make the music seem like it keeps going and moving, not stopping and starting. A lot of the slower parts of this piece seem out of place. The Chaconne is good. It could use a lot more variation, however. You did change the chords a couple times in the middle, but this piece could be a lot longer and with more variations. Why did you stop where you did?
November 20, 200520 yr Author Thankyou guys sooo much for this feedback it means a lot to me and is really helpful. First of all, i had a time limit on the chaconne of 2 minutes, so i had the kind of cut it short. With the Dance, I focused ALOT on each note to make sure it fits, I don't personally think there are notes out of place but thats because i have listened to it so many times. Also, in this respect I don't think i saw the forest from the trees so as a whole i think that is why maybe the form doesn't work too effectively. But yeh thankyou VERY much for the comments
