Hey there
First off, what a cool song 😄 I've never heard it before, but there was a lot of neat percussion stuff going on, like banging on things in the kitchen. She's got a great voice too. Nice mode mixture stuff, EDM effects in the bass, it's all great.
Ever get the melody to work for the mp3? I use Sibelius unfortunately. What if you just copied the notes into a new file or something? I'm sure it's just a weird bug.
What you have seems promising though. Looks like you emulated the guitar rhythm nicely with the string accompaniment. All the transcribing you did looks spot on