jtfletch11

Thank you for this!! This is exactly what I needed. 1. Thanks! 2. I agree, the Ab does sound tame. I attempted what I think you were saying - that is, moving to the F instead of the Ab - but having a minor chord so soon didn't sound right, at least for the emotion that I was going for (which I have still yet to figure out exactly). And if I were adhering to a more classical harmonic language, wouldn't Ab be more appropriate? IV-V-I (Gb-Ab-Db) seems to lean more towards classical than IV-iii-I, don't you think? I may have misunderstood, but I agree that moving to just a plain Ab sounds mundane - I will definitely try to address this. 3. Thank you for catching this! I wholeheartedly agree. 6. I will correct this - I am a very rookie pianist, and am still learning the ropes on appropriate piano texture. 8. I agree, I did not think the last few measures through carefully enough. It does indeed sound awkward. Change made :-) Thank you for time and your comments - very helpful. I hope to post a finished and nicely polished exposition soon. :-)

Hello fellow composers - I'm brand new to the site, and as my first post I'd like to ask for any suggestions you might have on where I could take this piece. I plan on adhering to a rather loose sonata form, so at the moment I'm trying to finish the exposition. Any general comments or theoretical suggestions would be most helpful. Thanks! http://www.scoreexchange.com/scores/129952.html (If this link doesn't work, I've attached a Sibelius file) untitled.sib