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I absolutely loved this! I think it is perfect as it is and should be published imediatley

Honeslty, I did not enjoy this piece one bit. It sounded pretentious and unlistenable and I wouldn't even bother trying to fix it. Just start something new and forget about it. Although, I do believe you have talent. I think you just got caught up being too contemporary and experimental.

Comletely agree with Josek Yung. The middle needed to be more hearty and thick (for lack of better terms.) Also maybe the ending could be a bit this way as well. It sounds a little transparent, and I would love for it to be a stronger finish. Overal: peaceful, and worth a listen.

I think you have a wonderful base to start with. And I think it needs work. Too many notes in each bar I think. You don't have to have alot of notes for a piece to sound impressive. Take out some of the triplets or whatever they are. Maybe. I don't have the answers I'm just wondering if it would sound better this way. And also I notice that some of the notes should be flat or sharp, and vise versa. I understand you were going for that kind of odd sound (which I love) but too much of that is really painful to listen to.

I am intruiged. The begining sounds a bit rough though. I absolutely love subject B. I think the begining is a little to abrasive for the rest of the composition. Try making it sound a little more "The Sound of Music" and a little less "The Nightmare Before Christmas." Just for the begining. I love the second part. You dont have to listen, I mean its your work so...just a few things that I would do.