HallsOfAscension

Oh yeah I see it now! I have a i | v | VI 7 | III-V | progression going on throughout the whole thing pretty much... I'm definitely gonna spice it up with some better chords! I'll see what I come up with in terms of the soprano voice. I always thought that was a weak line I had written, so I'll be sure to change it. Thank you so much!

So I wrote this piece a while back but I can't exactly put my finger on what it's missing. When I listen to it, it just sounds "meh." I had originally wanted to make a modern pop-sounding song that featured a solo cellist and a string orchestra to dedicate it to one of my friends, but since I'm not a songwriter I couldn't think of the right words to set to this. I was thinking of increasing the tempo to make it less boring and getting rid of the song form to make it an instrumental piece, but I still think I need a better melodic line for the chorus and more interesting pizzicato part. Any suggestions?