r(u)eaching a paragon

Hello! well this is the first piece i have posted on this site - and im doing it mainly for the purposes of getting opinions and suggestions from ears with talent as my family isnt exact musical and dosent always do the best job. id classify this piece as experimental, its written in a maj mostly, and the main instrument is a glockenspiel. its slides through 4/4, 5/4, and 3/4 time. anyways! i dont expect rave reviews, infact im just looking for ideas or opinions that will better me as a musician and composer, thanks for your time.

r(u)eaching a paragon.mid

Welcome to YC. It takes a while for people to find you and start commenting on your work. It always helps to comment on other's works in hopes they will comment on yours.

I liked the second half or really the last third of this. The middle section with all the pauses is just not to my taste, which doesn't mean a thing. It also helps if you can post a link to a mp3, midi sounds are not the best, well sibelius won't open yours right so I was stuck with the stock midi sounds.

Surf the the other parts of the forum, see who comments on others works, comment on their works and they will find yours. Thanks for the kind comments on "ramblings".

Good Luck

Ron

The melody did a good job of being...well, melodic. And very rhythmic at the same time, which is cool. The first part builds up nicely and is very cool.

I don't like the middle or last parts. The middle part was sparse had lots of interest because of that, but it went on for too long. Then I was praying for it to go back into the first part again (to go back home, essentially). And then it went into a new part, and I felt let down. This isn't necessarily bad, as long as you develop the first part or bring it back (otherwise, why was it included?). The second part wasn't bad musically, but it sort of split the whole piece in half.

FIRST OFF! thanks a lot both for the comments! i really value them immensely.

i do agee with both of you in saying that the middle is too naked, im thinking of adding some background noise to keep the listener attentive and avoid such pauses in future compostions. FURTHERMORE as far as the lameo stock midi sounds go its due to the very poor program i am using, and for my next composition i plan to use finale which will hopefully help with that.

thanks for being so welcoming!