My AS level composition!! PLEASE come take a look =D!!!

Hi. Comments and feedback are welcomed. As you can see from my THEME AND VARIATION piece, I wanted to create a strong beginning. In Variation II, I wanted the piece to become peaceful. In Variation III I adjusted it so that it becomes very disturbed and bizarre. Afterwards, it transforms into a waltz which I tried to experiment. It finally comes to a finale. Tell me how I should improve my piece and whether I should put the melody in other instruments more instead of just the flute and piano. Thanks =]

I cant find your piece..

Woops... sorry! Here's the sibelius file and midi file hope you guys have fun.

ryan_aslevelpiece.sib

ryan_aslevelpiece.mid

It's a bit repetitive, I thought it was minimalism initially. Consider expanding your melodic ideas. Also, I can't remember whether they will particularly hold this against you for AS, but it's not playable - the flute player is going to run out of breath. When I was submitting my AS composition my teacher made me ensure it was playable.

The chord sequence is also pretty stereotypical, it gets tiring rather quickly. But it's well put together, you clearly know what you're doing. Just expand a bit upon what you already have there.

Wow, I really liked it, nice work! :laugh: the flute is going right into my heart. I think that the piano and the flute fit very good together!

best regards

dronjom

very nice :laugh: lovely and splendidly resounding overall sonority and absolutely delightful melodies, and very creative variations.

just i think that the violin in some spots looses great part of its vitality and becomes a very irritating presence, mainly when it begins the 6/8 section, and later the problem becomes still worse. when it just play notes within the predictable scale it is definitely boring and it sounds perfectly superfluous. i think that if you keep an instrument in the group it should have a very important role to perform, an active part to play, and not merely wanders about fearing to shut up and fearing to say some relevant thing. in this case i think that it would be better to shut up, and not merely to avoid needless notes, but also to add a greater varitey to the general texture.

another thing is the way you make the transitions between the variations just before the 6/8 section and everyone after. it seems to me that they are too much enclosed inside themselves with little connection or plausible transition from one to another. even the sudden contrasts should make sense. if you create more coherent transitional links the whole surely would profit. you don't need to write in a telegraphic language, in blocks of sound, like as in a pot-pourri, you can write a more fluent speech, with prepositions, conjunctions, meaningful paraphrases, introductions and resolutions to each period, and gracious reinforcements to your verbs and substanctives. these devices can make the whole much more appealing than it already is.

anyway great job! congratulations!!!!!

Although that flute part would be possible if you could circular breathe, it's not otherwise. They definitely do penalise if it's not possible.

A lot of work went into that, and it's great! I think you have a nice unique style. What's AS though?

It's the first year of a 2-year college course that most students take after they finish secondary school.