January 27, 200620 yr Hi it's been awhile since I've posted but i recently wrote some lyrics and I'd really apprieciate some constructive critisisum. Oh yeah and one other thing before you read them I havent figured out how to record them and the music to go with them at the same time ...tips? Alright 1 of these is finished but the other still needs work Let it Fizz(my least favorite of them all) verse: thoughts ,friendly thoughts for the new kid in town note, silly note being passed all around it says shes a looser, a boozer, you laugh but inside you chorus: bottle of coke is fizzing like steam it's shaking like bacon but all that you do it keep it closed inside of you Verse: parents, angry parents they call you dumb teachers, crazy teachers let your parents sing on they say your grades are lower than scum, you laugh but inside your chorus bridge: decieving decieving you bleeding and heaving with all of your might to push things away from site and your going insane theres a hemirage in your brain but you just have to let it come loose cause breaking your bottle of feeling it freedom, freedom to being okay song 2 security hat verse: you woke up on a monday feeling somewhat out of place so on your way to school you bought a drink just to escape now on your way to pay you say it lying on a shelf a black wooly cap could it fill the void you feel put it on fix the back pull it down and bam its chorus: security hat, cause you can't take a chance on society pull the wool over your eyes but even if you try theres no hiding from reality just you warm..FUZZY... HAT thats all i have for that song so far let me know what you think! Beth
