Slow paced song (Metal-post hardcore)

Hi everybody,

this is the first track I`ve written for what it s gonna be my solo project. The song is very simple divided in 4 movements: introduction, atmospheric part, blooming part and conclusion. The voice is the "choir ahhs and the cello". I particularly like the song for the space it gives to me to sing on it.

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I hope I don`t waste 7 minutes of your life and let me know your impressions, positive or negative, it doesnt matter as long as they are motivated.

Thanks

P.s.=as usual, the mixing is very simplistic.

The introduction is somewhat boring. That's my initial thought, because it doesn't feel like it's building, even though it's getting louder. (Edit - As I was typing this, I was likening it to ISIS - some stuff can get to the point of 'almost' boring, but then it changes, and you realize that everything had to happen the way it did for this awesome moment to happen. It's a similar situation here.) I dig the sample of the guy talking. It's a little weird but it's got nice sound quality to it.

This is the kind of thing that MIDI can't do justice to. At all. This is like putting an ISIS song into MIDI. It just doesn't sound good. I like the use of inversions - not everything is a power chord. The bass helps that a lot. It reminds me a bit of Red Sparrowes as well.

If this isn't MIDI, then the song would be helped a lot by a better guitar tone, and better cymbals.

Aroudn 5:30 ish, I would recommend making the bass, instead of eighth notes all the way through, play the rhythm from the introduction.

I think this is well done.

What instruments do you play? Also, how old are you, and where do you live?

Thanks Jamie for you reply and your advices. I tried to change the bass line where you said but it doesnt convince me even because I would have to change the second guitar rhythm as well and it sounds weird, maybe because I m so used to the song as it is.

About the song quality: I know midi is crap but it does the job to conserve the melodies you want to reproduce. Hopefully, if I`ll be rich enough I`m gonna get everything played an recorded by humans at the beginning of next year.

In a way is funny that loads of people evoke this similarity with Isis which I cant deny is present although I have listened to one album of Isis (Panopticon) probably three times ;)

Here you can find another song I ve uploaded in the past for "Young composers" purposes and it would be interesting if you tell me your opinion about it, as I can see you have knowledge of the musical genre I do.

And to respond to your final question: I play no instruments and have never done a musical course, I just follow my hear. I`m 23 hailing from Italy but living in the UK. :)