September 6, 200817 yr I wanted to try something new like jazz piano.I have tried to write down the first few bars,please give me some feedback. jazz.MID jazz.MUS
September 7, 200817 yr This may sound a bit harsh, but I really do not think this is jazz music. You are a classical composer and listener right? I looked at some of your other classical compositions which were good. But to me this is not jazz music. It sounds very classical. I have been playing jazz music for quite a while (much longer then I have played or thought about classical music) and the best advice I can give you if you want to compose something jazzy is to listen to jazz music. What style of jazz are you going for? I'd be happy to recommend some listening to you or help you out if you would like.
September 7, 200817 yr Not trying to be rude but this is about as far from Jazz you can come. Sounds more like a bastard child between classical and show music. edit: You gotta listen, listen, LISTEN until you get the sound into your soul. Have a look at these and compare them to your own. Bill Evans Thelonius Monk Random Chap Jazz Moonlight Sonata
September 9, 200817 yr I have tried to write down the first few bras,please give me some feedback. :shifty:
September 25, 200817 yr One reason I wanted to comment on this thread was that I didn't think the suggestions for "jazz" were at all useful as they were too limiting. The 1950s were a watershed era for the remnants of bebop, hard bop, cool and the beginning of free. Pardon the pun, but "so what?" It has a history that stretches into at least the 1890s and continues, though as an ailing form, yet today. I didn't think that designbox' piece got a fair hearing, especially if it was held up to the standard of Miles Davis or Charlie Parker. If I were teaching someone Jazz who was unfamiliar with it, I'd start with King Oliver and Jelly Roll Morton. That said, designbox I don't think you're going to be able to convert this idea into jazz specifically, but I like the basic germ of it -- it's a high kicking, joyous little idea. Depending on you handle it, it could be a show tune, a music hall styled number, or even a sort of old fashioned, Western type barroom tune. About as close as it will get to being jazz is that you could convert it into a folk rag, like "Harlem Rag" by Tom Turpin, which is a completely respectable form of composition, though not jazz. The first thing is that you would need to get rid of the rolling, Alberti like bass; it's not well realized and drags the energy of the melody down. In bar 8, roll the chord at the beginning of the measure, and replace the four sixteenths at the end. Use two beats to lead back rather than one, on four eighths, the first silent and the remaining three leading upward towards the tonic, not downward as you have it. For a new accompaniment you might want to try a simple march beat and to rescore the piece in 2/4; thst will give it more lift and buoyancy. As to the tune, you lose your way at the end of measure seven; the tied over triplet is awkward and the rest doesn't make sense. Take what you started with and don't be afraid to reshape it into something that develops as a consistent pattern -- simple is okay, and it doesn't need to be "jazz." Uncle Dave
September 26, 200817 yr Author I thank everyone for viewng and giving me feedback,i do welcome more feedback.
September 26, 200817 yr I agree with what's been said that it's not really jazz, per se, but I see what you're looking at with those 2nd chords in there... I'd really look at Thelonious Monk, since you gravitate towards that concept. Also, Paul Bley is a good call, since he's a bit of both. Really, the biggest problems are the left hand -- while the bass does do straight quarters in basic walking, jazz piano tends to be chordal in concept, not necessarily harmonically, but multiple lines at once. And the line is too staid except for mm 4-7 I liked it though... neat ideas :)
