Just A Chance - Lyrics

[Verse 1]

Without that one true melody, there's nothing left here keeping me.

For this long and winding road that we pursue, bears nothing more for me and you.

[Chorus]

You can search both high and low, far and wide, to the depths below.

The final outcome remains the same, this daunting life is just a game.

The stage was set and the cast prepared, no space for he or for those who cared.

Down came the lights that i saw him tear, the evil eyes and the poisened glare.

They made their way to the fading house, in this life long game of cat and mouse.

Only to find that they be betrayed by the only who's ''being paid''.

[Verse 2]

Without that one true melody, there's nothing left here keeping me.

For this long and winding road that we pursue, bears nothing more for me and you.

[Chorus]

You can search both high and low, far and wide, to the depths below.

The final outcome remains the same, this daunting life is just a game.

He'll take it back and they'll start again, in search of trust and hope in fame.

The cancelled show is re-arranged, the tiring crowds yet more estranged.

The patient few who stood and stared, held nothing more than a fearful air.

There go the days of which you cannot bare, for the lonely one has gone elsewhere.

[Chorus]

You can search both high and low, far and wide, to the depths below.

The final outcome remains the same, this daunting life is just a game.

[Ending Verse]

This broken path we chose to take, is a standing cause for our mistakes.

These precious moments, they're make or break.

The loyalty is give or take.

From a purely structural point, it seems to me that your verses are more like choruses and your post-choruses are more like verses. If you were to take your "verse" and "chorus" and put them together as one, that would make a very strong chorus. A post- or pre-chorus shouldn't really be as long as yours is, but since yours changes lyric every time and is so long, it basically fulfills the structure of a verse. I'd take a look at your structure and think hard on why you labeled things are you did, and consider reorganizing the labels (even if not reorganizing their positions in the song).

Also, to the rhyme scheme... I, personally, will get very bored very fast with a steady, predictable rhyme scheme like this. It's entirely possible for music to make up for this, but variation in the rhyme scheme is one thing that can lead to variation in the music. Every line, whether verse, chorus or otherwise, has the same meter and the same rhyme scheme. Variety in both the rhyme scheme and the meter will help along the way with keeping the music interesting. In a very basic sense, sometimes if a verse has very long lines, it's good to clip the lines short or use one-syllable words, that kind of thing, when you get to the chorus. Or vice-versa. Give some indication to the ear of what's the chorus and what's the verse, and why they're different.

After that, I'd love to know what style this song is and if there are any musical, melodic or harmonic, ideas you're already playing with before I go deeper.

I can't be silent about this. I understand the intent was to help, but Will, it's rude to write music to someone's lyric without their permission. If your music is brilliant and the lyricist loves it, then no-harm-no-foul. But chances are, the fact that they posted here means the lyric is not finished and they might not be ready to move forward with it. They might want to work hand-in-hand with a collaborator, or they might already be writing music themselves.

To add a crucial element like that without permission is really crossing a boundary. In one of my posts, someone asked permission, and I denied them permission because I was already working on the music. No matter how talented you are, there are standards and there is etiquette. Other things need to be taken into consideration, and all you're doing is creating potential for a really sticky ownership issue.

I'm sorry for the harshness of my language, but I know how I would feel if someone did that to my work without permission. The lyric is the sole property of the creator and is not to be tampered with by others. This is a forum for discussion. Any changes or additions are ultimately up to the discretion of the creator.

" I can't be silent about this. I understand the intent was to help, but Will, it's rude to write music to someone's lyric without their permission. If your music is brilliant and the lyricist loves it, then no-harm-no-foul. But chances are, the fact that they posted here means the lyric is not finished and they might not be ready to move forward with it. They might want to work hand-in-hand with a collaborator, or they might already be writing music themselves."

Ok but I haven't exactly said that,

"To add a crucial element like that without permission is really crossing a boundary. In one of my posts, someone asked permission, and I denied them permission because I was already working on the music. No matter how talented you are, there are standards and there is etiquette. Other things need to be taken into consideration, and all you're doing is creating potential for a really sticky ownership issue."

I'm not really adding anything to it I was just using some lyrics to make music because that is what composers like to do :(

I'm not exactly saying this is somehow my song...I jsut used it for help and make a melody...

sorry for any offence :thumbsup:

is there any place where people upload lyrics and you can put music to them :(#

oh and I realise it was lame to delete 2 lines in the chorus :(

A song is a collaboration, a marriage of words and music. I doubt there are many lyricists who stick their work out on the internet so that anyone can come along and write music for it. If you'd like, look into books of poetry (your safest bet is with poets who are dead whose poems are in the public domain... try Shakespeare's sonnets, for example).

The point is, you were not "just doing what composers like to do." You were treading on someone else's property. It was not up to you to write music for the lyric, and you didn't ask permission. You say you didn't add anything, but music is a crucial element to a song and that's what you added.

Using someone else's lyric as a dummy lyric to get your own song started is one thing, but the next step from there is to actually make it your own. Take your new melody and create a new lyric around it.

This same thing just happened with one my lyrics in another thread, and there I had specifically denied someone permission to write music for me. I know this was not the intent, but it shows a lack of respect, whether you meant it that way or not.

OK, I understand now.

I have deleted my first post.

By the way, I am now working in collaboration with a lyricist so I won't be coming back to this place.

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