July 28, 200916 yr NOT FINISHED: UPDATED AUDIO WITH PIANISSIMO: http://www.box.net/shared/h32h4d974l Just think of a butterfly fluttering around. MP3: Butterfly.mp3 - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage PDF: Finale PrintMusic 2009 - [butterfly.pdf - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage Video: Picture inspiration: http://www.derekmccrea.50megs.com/images/abstract%20butterfly%20painting.jpg Rate and Comment but it's not finished so don't be too hard. I plan on adding more at the end. *Do not own rights to picture*
October 11, 200916 yr With the left hand being so common, you might want to consider some way to make it stand out. How you will do that is completely up to you. It will definitely create more interest for the listener. What I hear so far is (forgive my lingo as I dont know the terminology very well) an opening statement followed by a small development... When returning back to your opening statement, that is where I would make some serious changes to the left hand, and also firm up the main melody instead of improvising the right hand so much. There is no bridge that I can hear so far. This piece is good/pretty/moving... all that. But it needs a lot of work still to provide the listener with something interesting and "different" since you have chosen such a common progression with the left hand. Please dont take this as harsh or rude. It is very good work. I just think (and only I, thus far mind you....) that it has a lot of room for development and improvement. :) I too had the same problem when rewriting a draft my sister made up for her birthday. I posted it here in the piano section of the forum. You will hear the common left hand downward progression at about the 30 second mark should you choose to listen to it. The way I made it more interesting was to use overtones with the right hand and added a bunch of other things in between the places her theme came up. Keep at it. It will be a great piece! :)
October 11, 200916 yr Hey that's really good! :) This time, I don't think the harmony took away the melody! You have an interesting melody that keeps me wanting to listen. You're definitely getting the hang of composing for the piano! Though my only critique is the ending is a bit abrupt. Though you could do something as simple as a ritard to let the listener know the song is coming to an end. Then maybe add a few more chords at the end which follows the same progressions you used throughout the song. Nice work! ;)
October 11, 200916 yr Author Thanks Gamma... Could you look at IN A FIELD OF DAISIES... I think you would like it. :)
October 11, 200916 yr This is again carefree, like In A Field of Daisies, but it's different this time: it's not happiness caused by love, I think it's caused by... obliviousness? It feels like being blissfully unaware of anything, right up to the day you die. I think this is a very good piece!
October 11, 200916 yr Author Serge: Almost like a butterfly is oblivious... Just flies around carefree. Thanks for comments... You are dead on. I will be reviewing yours soon...
October 11, 200916 yr Serge: Almost like a butterfly is oblivious... Just flies around carefree. Thanks for comments... You are dead on. I will be reviewing yours soon... That does make sense, doesn't it? Neato! xD
October 13, 200916 yr is a musical of a very tender and sweet, I liked a lot, that's a perfect miniature
October 13, 200916 yr I think as a miniature piece this one is quite exceptional. Perhaps you should consider doing an entire album of these type of pieces - sounds like a nice project. Keep up the good work!
