Achan's Compositions

Hey, I'm new here. My name is Achan and I like to compose. Now away with the introduction let me introduce you to my newest piece i composed. I used two programs, Finale and Reason. There's a remix version, also i added the theme without the drums and beats. They are both completely finished.

Hmm, I liked the original better (nice bit with the trill - don't hear much of those at all). Maybe the Remix would work for a DDR-conversion, but all those bass hits don't really add much depth to the piece at all. The harmony feels a bit off here and there, though the theme itself might not be too bad - but the harmony gets in the way more often than not. Keep at it, though.

The bass hits get really annoying quickly. You should change the beat a bit, so it doesn't become a headache.

I agree, the bass thumping like mad has no clear direction it wants to go. Try better rhythms other than strong, weak, strong, weak, etc... But actually, just taht it take in this case, it distracts the listener from the important part. Which again, i can't hear because the harmony (strings) is sufficating it. And like the others said, the harmony doesn't match. But it's not too bad, just the bass is makes me want to randomly kill people, that's all =)

This piece has a nice feel, but....

You've heard about the thumping noise. Definitely needs to go. Also, the piece feels directionless. It doesn't really seem like it is going anywhere. Part of that is the fault of the harmony, but it is also the fault of the melody. When the melody wants to just wnader, you need to use harmonic progressiosn that lead the listeners ear back to the tonic every so often, so that we don't get lost.

Thi spiece goes nowhere and has jumbled up melodies and harmonies that make no sense to me. The rhythm is just the same thing over and over, not to mention that the same melodic line is essentially repeated the whole time. Sorry, I didn't like this piece and it needs improvement.

Hey! Thanks for all your "honest" thoughts about my song. I'm currently working on something newer right now. I'll post it when im finished the intro.

Finally, here is the intro to my newest piece. If anyone has an idea about what to name it, please tell me. Thanks. And please i ask for your honest opinions, Thanks.

This is definately better than the one above. It's not complete yet so, I can't really comment on it. But it's definately improved. Good job, Adam. =)

:P Thanks Ryan. Well here is my finished version of the Intro, Im probably gonna make something else that would fit together to make one big song. Please tell me all your thoughts, and at the same time please give me an idea about what to naem this song. :lol:

Well, now, I kinda feel that it's rambling on and on. =/ The melody on the second half is alright... it just needs something. I can't think of anything to say.. too sleep =P

I am reminded of Bach in places. This is a nice little piece so far. My only suggestion is to let yourself out of the box and add more chromatic notes and key changes to your composition. If it ends up sounding "bad" it doesn't matter, but you might discover some cool sounds that way!

Also what are people mentiong about drum hits? I hear none in either of your files...? a midi problem perhaps?

Hey, Derek! The drum beats come from another song I deleted earlier, to make some more space. Chromatic notes you say. I'll try it, Thanks Derek.

:) :D ;)

I've worked long and hard for this not toooo long but 58seconds composition. I would like to know what your opinion to this song. It's not completely finished, but all im planning to do is edit it, after you tell me what the mojority likes and dislikes. So please let me know what you think:D

Some of the bass chords don't follow throught together and it does get quite confusing which direction you are trying to go. But generally, you have a good sense in melody in this piece. The rhythm is pretty nice.... the harmony just needs a bit of work.

Also, I don't think you need the last C note, imo.

Keep it up!

I can't hear/dl anything... :'(

you hafta look for the song 2 posts up. or did you download it and cant hear it. if thats the case, sorry i dont know wahts wrong:(

Try this page, Stefan: http://www.youngcomposers.com/forum/composer.php

Under Achan, all of his files will be listed. The files for this post may have disappeared, however, because attachment space was recently limited to save bandwidth.

Hey guys, I've added a new instrument "strings" to mmy unknown2 unfinished piece. Dunno what to name it, This time can you please at the same time as giving me your opinions also think of a name for this piece. Thanks

:cool: Bump ):

Hey Adam! =P

The intro is very nice, I like it. Though once all the intruments come in, it kinda sounds mushy. Also, it's hard to figure out the important instrument -- the one playing the melody since all of them are playing different style of melodies. Just clean it up a bit and it'll be great! Keep it up!

Whew, that was really hard, thanks Ryan. I think I'm starting to understand what you meant. Well here is a revised version of the song, and it isn't near complete. I'm just posting it becuase I really dont know what to do next. Thanks

I'll just comment really fast and say that the violin does not go well together with the piano. Try a more harmonic relationship rather than forcing the listener to figure out the melody. I mean, try to make the violin go with the chord progression of the piano's.

I'll edit the first few bars to show you what I mean. =)

You have a very nice march effect going on in the beginning there, Achan. You lose it, however, with the piano solo. You lost the march bass rumbling, and in turn we get random sounding chords and notes. You need to refine what each note, by themselves, is doing, in order to create more coherency to the piece. I love the beginning, but when the piano loses the march sound it turns rather random and very green-sounding, to be blunt.

Hey Nickthoven, I'm not sure what you meant, are you saying i should keep the marching effect throughout the whole song?

Achan, Thanks ;)