Unrequited Love

A simple song I composed...how does it strike you?:blush:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SnkvZR2S_Vo

MP3 http://www.box.net/shared/np0ncjrlsp

Hello ^^

I think you're doing good if you have only been doing this for a month. There is potential in some of the melody writing and harmonic movement, so keep it up!

~Kevin

Thank you! I certainly have a ways to go, but I'm trying and enjoying making music!

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I enjoyed the melody so much ,

wonderful music .

keep up the good work , and thank you or sharing

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! :w00t:

A very longing piece - nice! From a compositional standpoint, however, I must make mention of a few things. You have a piano part and a viola part. The piano part needs to be the full piano not just the bass clef portions. Also, the viola part needs to be written without all the ledger lines. Violists can read treble clef and for higher passages like this it is expected that it is written in this - mainly for cleanliness of the score.

A very longing piece - nice! From a compositional standpoint, however, I must make mention of a few things. You have a piano part and a viola part. The piano part needs to be the full piano not just the bass clef portions. Also, the viola part needs to be written without all the ledger lines. Violists can read treble clef and for higher passages like this it is expected that it is written in this - mainly for cleanliness of the score.

That's a good idea about the piano and viola: thanks for that! :)

Serge

Welcome to YC and welcome to the wonderful world of composing.

One of the best things about composing music is that the more you do, the better you will get at it. I strongly suggest if you wish to get serious about composing, you start some type of training program. Whether it is to be self-taught or thru a more structured manner, all training will help you to compose better and will show you why this piece, although it does have promise, in its present form, it does not work very well. Parallel octaves with 2 instruments gets boring quick. For that manner, parallel motion can get boring quick whether it is in octaves or not. You want your instruments to compliment each other, not copy each other.

Repetitive rhythms can also get boring, so it always helps to chnge it up some.

As you progress you will understand more of what works well and what doesn't, so keep at it.

I have listerned to all of the pieces you have posted here and noticed that they are all very similar. Most of them use the same chord progressions and come across as just variations of a single theme.

This is very typical in composing. We think we are starting a new piece when all we are doing is some variations. When I recognize doing this in my works, I try to put them all together into one piece.

As I said, you will get better as you practice, so keep composing.

Ron

Serge

Welcome to YC and welcome to the wonderful world of composing.

One of the best things about composing music is that the more you do, the better you will get at it. I strongly suggest if you wish to get serious about composing, you start some type of training program. Whether it is to be self-taught or thru a more structured manner, all training will help you to compose better and will show you why this piece, although it does have promise, in its present form, it does not work very well. Parallel octaves with 2 instruments gets boring quick. For that manner, parallel motion can get boring quick whether it is in octaves or not. You want your instruments to compliment each other, not copy each other.

Repetitive rhythms can also get boring, so it always helps to chnge it up some.

As you progress you will understand more of what works well and what doesn't, so keep at it.

I have listerned to all of the pieces you have posted here and noticed that they are all very similar. Most of them use the same chord progressions and come across as just variations of a single theme.

This is very typical in composing. We think we are starting a new piece when all we are doing is some variations. When I recognize doing this in my works, I try to put them all together into one piece.

As I said, you will get better as you practice, so keep composing.

Ron

Point taken! I purposely used the Rain Lullaby's bridge as a sort of common element in some of my songs, so that's probably what you're referring. But indeed, I do need to start exploring instrument harmonies more: also exploring new rhythms. Thanks for the suggestions! :thumbsup:

That was simple but actually sounded beautiful.

That was simple but actually sounded beautiful.

Thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it! I know that with me personally, sometimes I just want to listen to something simple: I'm a big fan of Yasunori Mitsuda's minimalistic style, for instance, and I wanted to create something in the same vein as that, yet different. Thanks for the comment!

Hey Serge, welcome to YC from me first of all.

The piece sounds very pretty, although it is pretty repetitive. Rolifer already mentioned all the big bits and I agree with him that learning in some form of structured manner will improve your pieces considerably. But apart from that the very best thing you can do is practice, and listen to other people's pieces.

The more you listen, the more you'll get a feel for how to improve your own pieces.

As for direct advice on this piece, try varying the tempo a little in the two parts. What I mean is, the entire piece consists of crotchets and minims, (quarter and half notes, if you prefer) and both parts usually play the same thing at the same time. Try, for example, using a whole note with the strings and then quarter notes with the piano. Or keep the quarter notes you have with the strings and change some of the piano parts so they use 32nd notes.

So just mix up the formula a bit throughout the piece and in your different parts, it'll help stopping the ears getting bored. And just keep listening, and keep writing! Good luck.

Fox