June 22, 201015 yr From what I can hear, it is a very well written piece. That said, do you have a score to show us so we can further comment?
June 22, 201015 yr Author The score's a little messy since I converted it from Noteflight to MuseScore, but should give a rough idea as to what the piece looks like.
June 23, 201015 yr You said that the score wasn't the real score, so I won't comment on that. I really like the main motive which appears right away, it's a fairly driving idea. It might be nice if you had more variation in texture, you often have the left hitting chords while the motive repeats in the right hand. In general I think there's too much repetition everywhere. You shouldn't feel the need to extend pieces to reach a certain length. The left have is unusually high the whole time, which makes it feel like there's no bass line for most of it. In fact, you have a lot of your chords are in weird inversion which would make a whole more sense with the root in the bass. Good job, I want to hear more!
June 26, 201015 yr From what I can hear, it is a very well written piece. That said, do you have a score to show us so we can further comment? Liked it a lot! Almost perfect for me :)
June 28, 201015 yr I wasn't very pulled in by this piece, it provides a lot of repetition and not much development. For the style you're going for, I would also suggest ending on a root position chord. What I believe the piece is lacking is harmonic development; few degrees are used and there is no modulation or chromaticism. I would suggest workign on that, as it would make your piece much more interesting.
