July 29, 201015 yr Hi, finally I finished this piece. Its kind of a piano concerto. =) Any comments appreciated. Thanks for your time. Oh yea and piano is the easiest to follow on the score. Hope
July 29, 201015 yr Well, I listened to your piece "Hope". To label it as a "piano concerto" as you did is just too much, its like calling a drawing which I would make a Carravaggio, so even "kind of a piano concerto" is not the write description for this piece. As far as the music goes: it has potential, it is a nice tune, yet.... there is absolutely no variation in the melodic line, you turn around the same notes, over and over again. What I do not understand either is your orchestration, putting the melodic line in the violins, having it played unisono with the piano or in the flute and having it played unisono with the piano is very puzzling to me and does not add anything. For this your tune is not virtuoso enough, and not having a variation in the piano does not make kind of ... boring. With regard to the writing: there is no tempo indication, to begin with, there are no slurs, no accents, in short no articulation tool whatsoever needed for performers to play your music. Your chords in the first 23 bars are written in the wrong key, you should use the G-key for easier reading rather then the F-key, when you go way above the staff; bar 5-8 is the same as bar 1-4, apart for the base line, why not add thrids or sixths or something, which gives your melodic line a body, as for the base line in 5-8 why improvise a more virtuoso kind of passage...; 43-46 does not work as you wanted it to work, although I get the intention. As for the tonality: you write your piece with three b's at the key, this means that you either composed your piece in c-minor or eb major. Yet, you start your composition with chord completely alien to this tonality (A.You are closing on E. The last page, piano part should be written in G-key instead of F-key to make it easier to read and you should use an 8va for the higher notes. In writing, you seem to be afraid of sixteenths, you do not go further then 8ths, which is fine when your music is conceived as such, but yours could benefit from passages in sixteenth. There is no changing of key, everything stays in the same mode, no major minor, no nothing. Conclusion: I like the tune, it has good potential, BUT .... your score needs work. In my opinion perhaps I am wrong, this is one of your first pieces your write, if not the first piece. you have to grow, that much is clear, and perhaps my criticism is hard, it is nevertheless sincere. You have potential, as said, but needs to grow, to call your first, or one of your first pieces "kind of a piano concerto" is way over the top. Be modest, this will bring you the most far. But you have to study and read scores, bunches of scores. This way you will also see that "piano is the easiest to follow on the score" is also exagerated, your parts are far from difficult, not to be able to understand what is happening at a first glance. Kind regards, WS P.S.: sorry for my poor English, it is not my mother tongye
