Simple Piece of Cake

This piece was inspired by a simple piece of cake and the melancholic aftermath of its departure. The flavor of the cake is irrelevant.

Okay, it's short; fair enough, I understand that. I could tell there was a desire to really want to build on the initial idea but it really didn't come out as well as I would have hoped. It's kind of a tried-and-true start, normal... I - V - iv - VI... I guess I just wanted more time to hear it be described to me, branching off from the normal chord progression we've heard a lot and showing me why I should be engrossed... if that makes sense. 

That's the intended experience of the piece though. A fleeting moment that you would like to last longer. When the cake is gone, the dream is over, you don't get anymore opportunities to engross yourself in it's flavors or textures, which is the same experience I wished to convey in this piece.

It's a simple piece, inspired by a simple piece of take. 

1 minute ago, Mauro said:

That's the intended experience of the piece though. A fleeting moment that you would like to last longer. When the cake is gone, the dream is over, you don't get anymore opportunities to engross yourself in it's flavors or textures, which is the same experience I wished to convey in this piece.

It's a simple piece, inspired by a simple piece of take. 

 

Okay, fair enough, but the moment you're not around to explain that, then the difficulty of expressing art is supposed to come through. A piece being programmatically viable doesn't necessarily mean it's exempt from typical theory outlooks. Not trying to demean what you're saying at all, I absolutely get it, and respect it. This is just what people will do; criticize regardless of intention.