Narcissim

Hello;;;

i'd appreciate feedback on this track.

mixing in process as still learning // creative inputs are very much appreciated.

blisses,,,

bleum

edit: changes made; added bass like b major and minor chord elements.

Edited November 15, 20169 yr by Bleum

I like this. Not one of my preferred genres I admit but this is good I think.

I always compare stuff to other forms of entertainment or literature to best describe my thoughts on something and this sounds like something out of a vampire movie.

For my critique:

I was actually waiting for more high points where it explodes into a world of ear catching bliss but perhaps I've been spoiled by orchestral music. For some reason I can't play the track past 1:00 so if there is a high point as I described I apologize, my connection is weak at the moment.

Thank you for listening LostSamurai.

I apologise as I'm not very good at uploading content.

I just uploaded a soundcloud link which should work better.

bleum.

No the upload is fine it's just my connection gets weak whenever its raining here.

Edited November 15, 20169 yr by LostSamurai

Interesting work. I hear a really great opportunity to mix different tonalities in the piece. B major and B minor over an undefined bass would be cool.

After the first bit, the rest was perhaps a bit too repetitive for me; I know there are bits of change, but it doesn't contribute to the overall tone of the piece. 

I agree with Lost in his assertion that the highs should have been higher and the lows lower. Dynamic contrasts are important.

I appreciate your feedback, thank you for listening.

Monarcheon, I would really like to try out yours and LostSamurai's suggestions.

- Do you mean perhaps creating a B Minor and B Major bassline for the piece?

- Major highs and lows: I can see an opportunity for a low somewhere in the middle where i could place a 1 bar break and highs perhaps making the ending a bit more chaotic. 

Is this roughly what you mean?

bleum//

30 minutes ago, Bleum said:

Do you mean perhaps creating a B Minor and B Major bassline for the piece?

Not necessarily. More like switching between two to in the melody (homophony).

31 minutes ago, Bleum said:

I can see an opportunity for a low somewhere in the middle where i could place a 1 bar break and highs perhaps making the ending a bit more chaotic. 

Maybe. I more meant that the dynamic contrast throughout the entire piece/song is a bit lacking.