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Brandon S.

The Great Big Machine in The Sky - Brandon Schwab - all feedback is welcome

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This whole V/vi -> I thing you do is interesting, but maybe a bit overdone, especially since the voice leading is the same every time. This is especially awkward at 2:04 (m. 32) when the moment is undercut by the familiarity with the material.
Your counterpoint begins to get a bit rough around the minute mark. Passing tones against a static voice in oblique motion will not be heard as such; it's either a suspension or a retardation and both need to be substantiated.
Flutes at 24 could occasionally be in octaves to vary it up, give a bit of range. 
Interesting bit of hemiola at the end there. I'm not sure what the effect of that is.

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