The Bells: A Symphonic Poem

Hi, everyone. What I have here is the first movement of a symphonic poem I wanted to write based on Edgar Allen Poe's "The Bells." What I want to do is to rewrite the movement and then finally continue with the other three movements. Suggestions?

The percussion notation in the finale file got a little messed up as this comes from an older version of finale that used a different percussion font. Try to ignore it. :shifty:

The Poe poem is divided into four sections, the first of which I'll include here:

Hear the sledges with the bells-

Silver bells!

What a world of merriment their melody foretells!

How they tinkle, tinkle, tinkle,

In the icy air of night!

While the stars that oversprinkle

All the heavens, seem to twinkle

With a crystalline delight;

Keeping time, time, time,

In a sort of Runic rhyme,

To the tintinnabulation that so musically wells

From the bells, bells, bells, bells,

Bells, bells, bells-

From the jingling and the tinkling of the bells.

One final note: When I say "rewrite," I basically mean to enter into finale again and fix the percussion staves and possibly enhance some orchestrations. However, anyone who has any ideas on how I could expand or compress or altogether change this work is free to give their input as well.

bells.mus

bells.MID

:) delightful piece! for me it is very well written, but it is too short, seeming just an introduction to a larger development. maybe with the next movements it would work well as it is, but if you intend this bit as a self-standing one maybe you could consider expanding and developing the motives more fully. HOW you would do that, well, that's up to you :P i just cannot offer any advice on such style because it is not my field.