September 27, 20205 yr Hello, here's a cute piano song! I'd like to know what I can improve, while preserving this style. Thanks! piano.mp3
September 27, 20205 yr Romantic Ballad style, a bit mainstream and Disney for my taste, but sound nice though :) I would leave it like it is.
September 27, 20205 yr Overall this was nice with lots of variation in the harmonic voicings (such as plenty use of inversion). Also, I think you pretty much use the whole range of the piano, so great job there. I think there are some mistakes in the right hand? At 1:52 it sounds like the right hand runs into some accidental chromatics. An enjoyable piece overall. Thanks for sharing!
September 28, 20205 yr Author On 9/27/2020 at 11:03 AM, Guillem82 said: Romantic Ballad style, a bit mainstream and Disney for my taste, but sound nice though 🙂 I would leave it like it is. Thanks! Yeah, romantic ballad sounds about right 😀 21 hours ago, PaperComposer said: Overall this was nice with lots of variation in the harmonic voicings (such as plenty use of inversion). Also, I think you pretty much use the whole range of the piano, so great job there. Thank you! What do you think I should focus on improving composition-wise? What would be a good topic to study? 21 hours ago, PaperComposer said: At 1:52 it sounds like the right hand runs into some accidental chromatics. Ah, I wanted to try out lowered 9th on the V chord there for quirkiness. Does it sound out of place?
September 28, 20205 yr 15 minutes ago, BC345 said: What do you think I should focus on improving composition-wise? What would be a good topic to study? Well you already have some interesting bass movement in relation to the melody - maybe you could explore the use of some kind of countermelody? Just an idea. 18 minutes ago, BC345 said: Ah, I wanted to try out lowered 9th on the V chord there for quirkiness. Does it sound out of place? Well - at 1:52 it sounds like you use both a b9 and a #9 one after the other. There are places where such a treatment would make sense and some probably wouldn't find it objectionable but to me it sounded out of place. Maybe if you used just a b9 and then immediately resolved it down to the octave it would be a nice momentary color tone.
September 28, 20205 yr I was about to tell you the same, min 1:52 accidental look a bit out of the place. The rest works fine. I like how you finish it in the upper register.
September 29, 20205 yr Author I see, I'll be more careful with accidentals 😶 Thanks for the advice and critique, guys, I'll look into counter-melodies, then.
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